Under all that makeup
Lies a girl
With dreams the size of an ocean
And a perfect world
Under all that makeup
Lies a heart of stone
That is very strong and pure
But never left alone
Under all that makeup
Lies a pearl white smile
That is breathtaking
If only for awhile
Under all that makeup
Lies these big brown eyes
Filled with happy joy
And where evil is despised
Under all that makeup
Lies a good friend
With knowledge and kindness
Up until the end
Under all that makeup
Lies a perfect story
About a girl like you and I
That wins all the glory
Under all that makeup
Her true colours begin to show
That she was naturally beautiful
And little did she know
So as she began to take it off
She wondered why she ever put it on
Because refelctions of the mirror
Made her grow confident and strong
Author notes
This is for Option ♥3
My name is Jackie ♥
A contest entry
- Poets 12&Under by FallingTwilight.
700 points, ended August 8, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 28 entries
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Silver trophy winner
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Not really what I was looking for. But regardless, you did a good job!!!
I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering!!
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Very Nice. I really liked this write. It has a very true meaning. Good job and congrats on the silver.
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this was very nicely written.i luv the emotion in this.good luck in my contest and the other contests u entered.keep up the good work.
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I really like the comparisons you've used in this piece. The repetition works well at the beginning of each stanza too. I liked this very much. Great job here! :)
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this was really beautiful.. the wording was not as strong.. and the ending was a bit weak.. but it caught my eye.. and i enjoyed reading it.... PLEASE write more.. and how old are you?
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This one is great, it have a really strong point and it is really true for a lot of girls AND boys. Not only girls use make up
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Wow- Wow, was my first and only thought. I loved, and I mean 'love' this poem. Perfection in the making.
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this is a great poem. thanks for entering!
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I love the message! You've expressed it clearly and beautifully in this piece. The last stanza is very powerful. I wish you the best of luck and thank you for entering,
FallenPoeticAngel
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very good
Someone I know always says "Life is lived from the inside out".
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