you will come for me
late in the morning
when the sun has left the treetops
here you will find
the scent of burnt cedar
lingering still in a ring of cold stones
a moment of ground
only slightly disturbed
and no other trace of my passing
in the tall green grass the rustle
of an unseen wood mouse
may break the silence
look to the east
there is the pine studded hill
that sheltered my quiet morn
i have learned first light
to rise with the day and live
not in wait
if you would find me then
follow the small white clouds
beyond the horizon
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i have learned first light
to rise with the day and live
not in wait
There's only one thing holding me back from living out this verse. That's called the law. I still don't understand what "first light" you are talking about. Rephrase for me, please. -
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the "first light" of dawn.
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lol. I really find it hilarious and kind of beautiful that you're so in love with nature you don't have anytime to think about love with a human being, preferably, a woman.
When you have found a woman everything goes to Hell. lol. I'm sorry. -
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yea the women i end up with seem to bring about that "goes to hell" effect. :-/
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Camping is fun...
I went camping with a friend at the beginning of June....and that is what the second stanza reminds me of....we had stones surrounding the fire and if one of the dudes didn't get up and build it in the morning for breakfast the stones would be cold....
the title gives me the image of you scribbling this down real fast in a rush and nailing it to a tree for some random person to find and follow the instructions...lol...which after what I have been reading about you lately it would not suprise me if you did this...lol... the first stanza sounds like you know they are coming....and the faith is so strong you already know how long it will be until they get here...beautiful first stanza..beautiful opening. "look to the east, there is the pine strewn hill, that sheltered my quiet morn"
I will find me another canopy before I die...and when I do I will make sure no one can take it away from me...Erin! I feel so alive today and this poem fits for some reason....the words seem to bounce on the page....I wish i could express the way I feel inside right now...exactly how i feel...because if i could I am sure you would dub it as the best poem i have ever set out to write....great poem..great expression
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wow.
this poem sets off alot of psycological thoughts and feelings.
a moment of ground
only slightly disturbed
and no other trace of my passing
i like that alot.
it's like...so peacefull but darkened.
i really like the feeling i got
when i read this.
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