Will you hold my hand,
As we walk through them golden gates,
Just our fingers lingering,
It's getting kinda late.
The gates are closing soon,
I've been waiting here since noon,
I need to know if you'll show,
Or am i going this alone?
Now as we take our final stroll,
Through these gates made of gold,
I Feel safe coz i know,
Your never gonna let me go.
In a list
A contest entry
- ♥Drop The Dagger And Lather The Blood On Your Hands, Romeo!♥ by On Frail Wings..
550 points, ended August 25, 2007, 44 entries
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Very nice poem. It's soo good to be in love.
Keep writing and God Bless
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Awwwwww.... So sweet... Awwww Shaun's in love.... Thats so cute... with Storm of Death... awwwwwww I loved this piece... go you!
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awww. this is sooo sweet and cute. the rhyme was really good. i liked it a lot.
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thnk u very much..
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Ok, this is a peaceful and serene write, and I ever do this, but I think the last line should read..
Your never gonna let me go....I think it all has a great tempo and at the end it seemed abrupt. If I didn't like it I would not point this out. Aside from that hair splitting, I enjoyed the poem. BRAVO.
BLESSINGS ALWAYS,
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thnx for tht..i will change it..thnx again..
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Nice
Great penning you have done here. so sweet. I like!
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thnx..the feedback i get means alot to me..so..it never goes unnoticed..thnx again
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AWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :]
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This is a wonderful poem, and thanks for your entry, but I will have to disqualify you because it's a love poem. Feel free to enter any of your other poems though! (Just not about love
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I will never let go my dear Shaun... I love you too much...
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