My efforts seem to go for naught
Pleasing is what your skin is to me
Standing near, we resemble a likeness
Yet resistant to on looking eyes
I adore you
I cherish that which you fail to understand
My breast caressing your back
As I greet you
Your feminine wares tempting me
Requesting my presence
Before you
For your bidding is adhered to
Upon your request
Will you ever know my desire my secret
Aspiration to have you, hold you
As mine?
Sharing that ultimate
Destined moment with you
Will last a millennium
Within my heart
If you say yes
To my love
Author notes
sweet, innocent love
A contest entry
- So In Love (Lesbian) by shysky.
550 points, ended August 9, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lesbian Erotica, Ya'll wanna enter by A-Sky-Lark.
725 points, ended November 23, 2007, 20 entries
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i like it, I'm sure we've all been there. Somebody you wanted so bad and couldn't have. yeah, it's a pain in the ass but this poem rocks. I loved it, very beautiful and well written.
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thanks so much. My girlfriend friend gave me the idea, She couldn't express it so I put it into words for her. Love is love. Gender restrictions is just a way of control for those that truly doesn't respect life. Oops. almost got religious
thanks
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Some grammar errors "upon you(r) request)
a comma after desire and my
nice i thought this in the focus intention of a pending question...thebeging did change toward the end...someow you put the picture in your whole message hear...cretive effor -
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Good catch, I have to audit my stuff better, Thanks 4 the read. ~ myKey
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Awesome
Soft but powerful
the emotions behind this
are breath taking.
Loved every word of this
Great job Mikeeeeeeee
Love & Hugs
~sugar~
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Thanks Sugar!! you know this was for a lesbian competition? I had to try it. No matter what. I love the challange ~ thx ~ MyKeee
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deep word you have culled from understanding, with an open mind of how very innocent and sweet this affair can be the first time. You have some strong imagery, you have just done justice to this contest in beautiful verse.................novy
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it was strictly emotions no matter what race, creed, color or sexual preference. It was different and I love challenges ~ thx ~ mykey
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Fantastic
This is Fantastic,I loved every word of this..but your feminine wares tempting me is just GREAT.. This is written softly but the emotion it gives is far from soft,Very powerful poem...Good luck to you in all things and thank you for sharing!
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((smile))
Thanks so much ~ kind of fun to switch places to express my desire 4 women ~ Mykey
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