Hold me now; I know it’s the time for me to be gone,
I feel somehow, your warmth within my cold bones,
Like seizing the waterfalls under the suns of Eden.
Look at me now, your eyes will tell me your love the best,
I can feel somehow, your lips crawling upwards my chest,
Heartbreaking, breathtaking, under the suns of Eden
Before I go, let me sweep your fears
Because there, I’ll look for our reminiscences
Before I go, let me rub your tears
There I’ll wait for you, flirting my senses
Like roses in a garden under the suns of Eden
And I need you to know
That I will draw
Your gentle shadow
Under the suns of Eden
Author notes
option 4 (WRITE WRITE WRITE - OPT 4)
A contest entry
- Show me what you're made of!!! (extended 4 more days) by Wrozes Thorne.
300 points, ended August 14, 2007, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Intense with After Affects! (Rhyme Only! Pre-writes Allowed) by x Simply x Me x.
450 points, ended August 2, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 10 options for the creative poet by bananasfoster42.
700 points, ended August 2, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All You Need Is Love by xSweetDreamsx.
800 points, ended August 31, 2007, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write, Write, Write!! by xCandieKissesx.
450 points, ended August 6, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oh the joys of love by The Hardest Goodbye.
450 points, ended August 9, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SONNET PREWRITES ... Surprise me! by Emerald Lass.
475 points, ended September 9, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - who you love by Merciful-Manner.
431 points, ended June 7, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lovely poem!
Fine writing... lines that hold images so true!
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wonderful poem, thanks for entering it in my contest,good luck and best wishes
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kandy -
I love the imagery. It was clever and creative! The flow just kept on going. I like how the rhymes fit in perfect. Bravo! Good luck in the contest!
Jackie ♥ -
I personally thought the lines were a bit long, good idea, but maybe make the lines a bit shorter and more catchy, good write though Good luck
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this is a great write. please be sure the put the option 4 me. thanks for entering
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sorry to forget that. good luck for both of us
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wow this is an amazing write! GREAT imagery. great emotion! thank you for entering and good luck!
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thks, that was great to read as a comment, still searching to read more of ur comment on my poems
good luck to both of us in this one of the most marvelous contests
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another great trip!
great imagery and imagination amigo...i loved this!
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thks man that's pretty amazing to hear
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Nicely written! There was an eternal feeling to this poem, like whatever happened would last for all of time. Keep up the good work!
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thks, lkn forward for more of ur comments on my other poems
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