We dress beneath flowers
[of every singular occasion
and marry
under the guise of 16]
Poppy cheeks; sun bursts across
forehead, chin.
Dimples in the shade
[wilted petals of summer heat
surround the scream in my eyes]
Woman. Painting stars
on fingernails,
chewing the moon in half;
the silk of a million geishas between thighs.
Woman. Mystery of the virgin
temples. White shrouds, veiling
eyes with gauze
[mummified in these traditions
of mothers, grandmothers, Eve]
Slipping a heel into leather, I
walk on the clouds.
Slipping a finger into gold, I
fall to the center of earth.
On my wedding day I tighten the curls,
slick venus on lips
and tuck a daisy behind my ear.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- closes soon by Melissa Gayle.
360 points, ended July 31, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Coolness
wtg on the silver Ms. Meli and any ways this was an incredible poem and I like no title poems becaus eit heightens the appeal of the poem and it also makes ya wonder what it'll be about. very nice work and keep up the good work
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Lovely silver!
I like the etheric quality of this...the lightness.
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this is really good.
I like the fact it's innovative and creatively formed
with lines that are memorable without being to literal
and hell I'm not good at analysis but I do know what I like.
Good'un
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Woman. Painting stars
on fingernails,
chewing the moon in half;
the silk of a million geishas between thighs.
Lovely, soft and pretty as only women can be.
Truly a treat.
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I like your style. Very nicely done. Congrats.
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! loves me loves me not
whay lovely imagery and feeling
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oohh this is a WOMAN poem for sure.. it has all those little bits that we tie up in daisy chains and try to make he loves me/he loves me not lives up in our heads...
and then we wonder...
where did all that time go.... where?? and why.. did it slip through our fingers so damned much
eh? indeed
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Yes, it is quite feminine in here, isn't it?
Thank you.
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yes, so many things in life beneath flowers, wonderful images here and a sweeping view of the ages.... PK
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This is certainly amazing. I must agree with Melissa, this is quite the profound poem. The images are certainly deep and rich, the emotion is vibrant and certainly thought provoking. Excellent job and best of luck.
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i agree with melissa.. some wonderful images and definitely not an eh
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Thank you.
The first and second stanzas trip me up a bit. It started out "Orchid cheeks" but I wasn't sure if that image would be understood.
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poppy cheeks is good..
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Wow...great imagery. The feel of the poem is beautiful. No 'eh' to it.
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Thank you.
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Why are you ehing?
This is just amazing, the images and the emotion. Damn. I wanna be like you when I grow up.
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lol
Thank you.
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No, "eh" allowed. Great imagery. I like this very much, Melinda, very much indeed.
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You're just saying that because I look cute with a daisy tucked behind my ear. lol
Thank you darlin'.
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