Circling around the mournful woman
The wind howls with laughter
It picks up the leaves and hurls them at her
Her world is officially over.
The woman tumbles to her fall in a desperate plea
And reflects on her personal experiences
She can't believe she's come to this
And cries a river of consequences.
She grieves for the life she never had
A life full of wonder and mischief
She regrets her time spent on useless matters
She appears extremely pessimistic.
She suddenly stands up from her fallen position
And picks up the tormenting leaves
Her yearning of a better life starts forming
And that's when she walks away and leaves.
The woman becomes optimistic and brave
Taking on the world's most daring challenges
She then starts to form very close friendships
With generous neighbours and even strangers.
She bonds with the leaves who mocked her downfall
And cares about the earth's nature
That's when she makes a deal with the leaves
And takes the role of kind Mother Nature.
A contest entry
- An AllPoetry Extravaganza-3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
3000 points, ended September 11, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for your entry. This was an enjoyable read. I like the way it moves from tragedy to hope and survival.
Best of luck in the contest. -
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Thank you for your entry into the Allpoetry Legacy contest. Nice done with good thoughts. More imagery would improve this a lot. Good luck in the contest.
Paul -
I agree with Lisa, I would have liked to have seen more instead of being told.
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This was really nice, and I think that you did a wonderful job. Thank you for your entry and the best of luck
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Thank you for your Legacy poem! Keep in mind as you write that poetry is often about showing and not telling -- more inference and less straight out story writing.
Best of luck as you continue to grope in the darkness of Poetry.
Lisa -
very beautiful and touching. I really enjoyed it.
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