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Chains of Love

O' flowers of beauty,
beautiful hues.
Roses, violets, and lilies,
reds, whites, and blues.
Beginnings of spring,
joy from the heart.
Love is so sweet,
yet bitterly tart.
It binds us together,
without reprieve.
It brings us joy
we cannot believe.
A life of love
is life complete.
The chains of love
we cannot defeat.
We are bound together,
like it or not.
We share a deep trust
that cannot be bought.
Our souls rise together
on the wings of a dove.
Forever together,
bound by true love.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 12, 2008
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    Very beautiful, I love all these flowers.


  • hey charlie
    April 14, 2008

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    I thought it was pretty cute. Rhyming was good and the tempo never screwed up. It flowed nicely, over all. I'm not a big fan of rhyme but I'd say that you pulled this off well.


  • FallenAngel09
    April 1, 2008

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    I found this to be a very interesting poem. It had a nice overall scheme and seemed to be sincere. It had a nice lazy quality that comes with the beginnings of spring, that I thought fit it so well. The only two critiques I do offer is the fact that the rhyme seemed just a little forced and when you said beautiful twice, I thought it was said far to close together, which detracted from the overall scheme of the poem. Other than those two critiques, I found it to be an exceptional write. Great job and good luck.

    Hugs and Kisses,
    Tiphanie


    • Austere
      April 1, 2008
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      I understand what you mean about the use of beauty and beautiful so close together, and what you said about the rhyme scheme. What I must point out is that both have a purpose. Ok, the rhyme scheme is actually not as much for a purpose, but it was written as a loose rhyme. I wanted a rhyme scheme, but I did not try to force words to fit, I just used words which ended similarly and gave the poem meaning. As far as the use of beautiful, that is also intentional. I used them to create a feeling of repetition in the beginning which is meant to give the feel of a cycle, which is a clue as to my viewpoint. I have read it a few times both for fun and to find possible improvements. I actually found I used together too often. I will probably edit that. Still, this poem might not be perfect, but many of my female friends have fallen in love with my poetry due to this poem...


  • P. W. Blackwell
    March 30, 2008
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    i like it a lot very well written


  • Mujina
    February 5, 2008
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    .... amazing.... I am at a loss for words.... thank you and good luck.


  • Melodies
    October 30, 2007
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    Whisking this away to Poetry Planet and I thank you so much for sharing this magnificent and beautiful poem.

  • Melodies
    October 29, 2007

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    What a truly gorgeous poem this is!

    Splendid writing with lovely images that melts my heart and makes me smile! Fine writing that inspires the reader to reach out and write about nature, especially flowers and love.


  • jcat gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    this poem had wonderful flow and great rhyme! thank you for entering and good luck with the contest.


  • Beating gold member
    October 24, 2007
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    "A life of love
    is life complete."
    I love those lines, because they're so simple, yet so true. You shouldn't measure your life in wealth. At least not your wealth in money. You should measure it in love. I love all the things you say in this piece. Very poetic!


  • the-gifted
    September 15, 2007
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    wow it flowed so nicely together. GREAT WRITE! I love it. thanks for entering and good luck.


  • tinuelena
    September 6, 2007

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    'Our souls rise together
    on the wings of a dove.
    Forever together,
    bound by true love.'

    ...I explicitly asked for no cliches and no rhymes in my contest rules. I even SAID don't use the word 'dove.'

    If you can't be patient enough to read the rules, you're as good as disqualified. Sorry.


  • LadyKate
    September 4, 2007

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    Beautiful emotion and wonderful rhyme. I love the flow if this poem. Thank you for entering and good luck


  • Regretlove
    July 31, 2007
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    Beautifully written! Thank you for entering.

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