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+Glitterless+ Eyes && [Sugar] Coated {Cocaine}

 
I pray for your love
I Hope for your dreams
But the bullet shattered my thoughts
Or so it seems 
 
My lips pressed against yours
Tasting of sugar coated cocaine
The wonder of your trust
Never seems to be the same
 
Your touch kept me alive
Left me wanting for more
The power behind your lips
Left me broken and sore
 
Scratches from your nails
Upon my wounded heart
The sharp pain I bare inside
Left me alone in the dark
 
My love has grown cold
Leaving me with power
The light at the end of the tunnel
I've chosen to grow empty and sour
 
Glitterless eyes left blind
Lost in all it's delight
Your kisses keep me warm
Harmless from my fright
 
My tears now run dry
Keeping me sane in thought
I pray for one last breath
But left to be distraught 
 
 
 Chantelle M. DeJong 7/30/07

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Option 3 - word bank ... the words I used are bold in the poem ... hope you like ... Copasetic Candy is my screen name

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 12, 2007
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    So dark and bitter... Loved the way you got the word bank into this piece, it seemed almost natural. I loved the imagery and the expression of pain, love and confusion... All the way through I can just feel sadness, a sadness I have felt before and never want to again. This was a wonderful write, very impressed with your rhyming here.


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    July 31, 2007

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    sweet, i love it....

    very nice wright here i like how you made the words youused in bold much easyer on me..lol

    but really nice wright much love..xoxox

  • oldphotosonlybringt
    July 31, 2007
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    hay well just looking at this poem it sounds like a wounderful wright but i did not read it and i will not read it untill you go back and cheek out the ruels i asked for you to put your name and option but i would oh so love to read this and i will do so as soon as what i ask is done please fix it ASAP

  • Killswitch Engaged
    July 31, 2007
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    well written my sexy wifey

    its sounds like its kinda personal but i dont know its a very very deep writing but i like this


  • Endlessdreams
    July 31, 2007

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    wow sissy, deep very deep........ your poetry is really inspiring for others...... it shows how deep you are and i like it alot keep them coming

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