I knew when you left,
Things would change,
It's the way of my life,
Nothing good stays
So I stay in my shell,
My little place to hide,
Where I live in hell,
Thinking bout my lies
Most poems I've read,
Are about others,
Their god damn mistakes,
Too good for their own
But you know what I'm not,
I'll tell ya what,
I made the mistakes,
Not you, not this time
Yeah, I loved you,
Yeah, I cared,
But it was stupid to think,
That would stay that way
I'm sick to my stomach,
Of these petty things they say,
My life's fucked up,
But I made it this way
Oh whatever,
I'm wasting my breath,
No one is listening,
Nobody cares
Author notes
I know its odd, but whatever. just writin things down.
A contest entry
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2300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 220 entries
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300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 56 entries
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aww i love this! i have to say that i have felt this way and i am listening if i am reading this. i love poems that are really just ramblings! thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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Deep in the sense that you are writing directly from your current emotions and putting them in a poetic-journal style. I like the ending when you put "no one is listening, nobody cares". It's a good conclusion.
Thanks for entering your write at A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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hmmm
you should give people a chance...
people can change...
people can care.. -
Again I like it! But you should know that no matter how it may seem there are people out there who care about you people who want to help you thrugh whatever! Good luck with everything and nice write! Keep writing I love your work...oh and btw this poem isn't gay...so you should change your Author note
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thats not true a lot of people probs care bc i do i feel the same way as u any way this is a great poem i love tit alot
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wow....i can really relate to this poem...i like it a lot...u did a great job on it!!!...now i have to go read all the other ones u posted...lol....great job i love it!!!!
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Wow dude I know what that feels like. your not alone trust me and Many may not care but I do.
\i love your honest words and language you dont try to be clever or mask the meaning of the poemwith complicated words. your accent makes it realistic. I love your spin on the way you accept its your faulty. it takes alot to realise that. and after reading your poem I can admit that I have a fucked up life and most not all but most is probably my fault.
so thankyou for the lesson the great poem and the comfort the words gave me. -
Coolies :]
♥--T.R -
NICE!
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