Some of these times when I walk
into nothingness.
There are dreams to be had
when I see our grass is still the same.
It isn't always green, either.
We've walked these steps before,
going off-track little by little,
exchanging glances,
stealing kisses.
And it never gets old.
And we never get younger.
But we held life so close to our hearts,
And we've dared to dream
one time before;
Speculating from a dreamer's
point of view.
There is love to be had
within our shades of green.
We've got nature in our veins from
the passion we have seen.
When we kiss, I see the trees.
Author notes
Ash-er-mah-leigh
I'm not enjoying this round. Funny because I thought it would be easy...
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 5 by Frodofan.
480 points, ended August 4, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Don't tell me what you think, I'm too tired of this town.
Comments
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My favouritest of the three. Happy clappies as promised
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This one makes me happyzors, it reminds me of the daffodils
Your imagery is beautiful, and you've got some really clever lines in here-
"And it never gets old.
And we never get younger."
I love that in particular.
Your emotion and message are very vague, which makes the poem very gentle and open to interpretation.
Happy clappies shall follow when I have some more, lol.
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Hey j00. Gimme clappies.
♥
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Love Sparks the Trails that Only We Dare to Cross (We're in Another World) by Ash-er-mah-leigh
Title - 7
Style - 8
Form - 8
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 10
Originality - 9
Reaction - 7
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 9
Enjoyable - 8
Total- 86
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Love Sparks the Trails that Only We Dare to Cross (We're in Another World) by Ash-er-mah-leigh
Title - 7
Style - 8
Form - 8
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 9
Originality - 9
Reaction - 9
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 9
Enjoyable - 9
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score
Title - 7
Style - 5
Form - 6
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 10
Originality - 10
Reaction - 7
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 10
Enjoyable - 7
Response Bonus - No - 0
Rhyme Scheme Bonus - No - 0
Meter Bonus - No - 0
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Thanks for the score. I'm just glad I got in on time!
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That's ok. Hopefully you'll still make it to the next round. At least you made it in.
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A Very Beautiful Poem
Ah, This Is A very Sad, In Some Places, But Beautiful Poem! Nicely-Written, And Words Well Expressed! It Touched' Me!.'God Bless You'.Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo................
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Hah, thank you.
I wrote this on the spot for a contest I'm in...
And I hate it.
I don't even know what I was rambling about...
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