To whom we have raised we will pass our legacy
Hours spent in living a life without meaning
or moments of meaning compiled carefully.
Teaching moments leaving behind a memoir
of who we are, and life's important apexes.
Heights of expectations we leave to be risen to,
and encompassing mileages of untraveled roads
to challenge and inspire exploration and mobility
in motivated ancestors wanting to aspire to Everests
no one else has yet ascended, or given name to.
Atop, where we stand looking down upon waves,
not of water but of swaying bodies left standing
as life washes over them unnoticed. Unmarked.
A legacy left them, swaying to balmy breezes
temperate, always expectant of what never comes.
Treasuring almost was, and chance in back pockets
empty of dreams, held in place by depressed muscle
and mediocre excuses of what could have been.
The knocking stopped long ago, opportunity wanders,
eluding all but the most tenacious, and determined
seekers, who remain too focused on eventual success
to see the many obstacles in their uphill paths.
We leave a legacy, from armchair or plow share.
Learning from us they will appreciate, what we loved
and accumulate that which we have treasured.
They learn to respect what we have showed care for
and attain that for which we have endeavored.
Each lesson lays cornerstone, or a foundation,
other's will build upon, or not as they choose.
We leave our legacy as individual, family or country.
But if we care enough, we have the ability within,
to effect in some way, the legacy of all three.
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A contest entry
- An AllPoetry Extravaganza-3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
3000 points, ended September 11, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really like your poem. The block form works well, but I think it would benefit from being broken into smaller blocks or stanzas to keep the readers eye moving from thought to thought without running them together.
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest. -
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Thank you for your entry into the Allpoetry Legacy contest. Stanza breaks or breaks of some kind would be useful to separate thoughts and themes. Also, it seems that many words could be eliminated as this leans more to poetic prose. Best of luck to you.
Paul -
Thank you for your entry into the Legacy contest.. good luck to you. This might benefit from some stanza breaks..to help the reader, read easier.
Lisa -
Sweetly done.
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Awww what a remarkable piece here. This was really nice. Thank you for your entry, and I wish you the best of luck
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I do so love the way you ended this with so much hope for the world and for ourselves. A great piece for the prompt given. Love, C
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