Some smart looking chick walks across the street,
what do you think is in it for me, just a leg I see.
Because I look, an accident, the Dr says I'm an amputee,
what do you think is in it for me, just a leg I see.
When supper is a cooking, and they call me in to eat,
what do you think is in it for me, just a leg I see.
This is a poetry contest, the winner might be me
what do you think is in it for me, just a leg I see.
Author notes
My muse was a poet- Mr Longfellow -
he taught me - k.i.s.s.
keep it short & simple - lol
A contest entry
- An AllPoetry Extravaganza-3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
3000 points, ended September 11, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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tagedy and humor...these are the things that keep us from being bitter...to weigh one with the other...well done.
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This is a fun read. Catchy rhythm and an original approach. Thanks for enterring and best of luck
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Humor in tragedy's sadness. Moving forward.
Fantastice repeat "what do you think is in it for me, just a leg I see.". Sorry for the loss but somewhere in there I see gain. Thank you for sharing your soul.
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Moving forward
that is what it's all about -
notice my comment is - what do you think is in it for me- not what I think -lol
thanks
B D
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Thank you for your entry into the Allpoetry Legacy contest. Clever play on the words there. Short but nicely done.
Best of luck in the contest.
Paul -
This really is a play on this word - really very creative and unique. Liked how you took the prompt by the horns and made it your own. Good luck in the contest.
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Erin
Your so sweet and I respect you much - thanks
B D
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I love what you've done with the prompt, you must have a truly openminded muse! The repetition gives it an almost chantlike quality, and makes it so I can sense something in the story beneath what is shown. Wonderful!
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Lost
One of us is off our rocker -
maybe we just take turns-
Thanks- it is deeper then some think
wait till part 2 comes out and explains more
Thanks
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I like it, the repetition is always a favorite of mine. It has a nice even quality to it, that is almost song like, but not quite. One thing I do have to say is, the poem shouldn't necessarily be longer, but the stanza's should if you are going for the repetition. Other than that, it was a pretty good write. Good luck in the contest.
Tiphanie -
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Thank you
Normally people would make the stanzas longer, but as I am not normal- I opted not to. I had considered this one for lengthing and will take it aside another time for another time with my muse to add more.
Muse says she is busy so it waits.
Thanks mucho
B D
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A cute write.
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. This was very clever and it put a smile on my face. I wish you the best of luck
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Thank you for your entry into the Legacy contest ..
The last word of Line 3? You might check the spelling unless it is a word I'm not familiar with and that is certainly possible but I was thinking you meant amputee ...
Lisa -
haha this is a wonderful muse
keep the ink flowing.
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it flows - I grow
the ink will flow without me
but still I go on
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