I look back on my life
and think about my past
I remember my lies
and loves that didn't last
I think to my self
with a casual sigh
what am I doing here?
Who am I?
What do I want to be
What will I leave behind
will I be remembered for hate
or because i was kind?
Will my kids be proud
Of a hard working mother
or frown and cry
because I'm a bother?
Will I die alone
with no husband to kiss
will i live off affairs
and brief moments of bliss
I am still young
and this i know
but my entire life
I do not want to throw
I want to be something
To show them i'm great
But do i depend on destiny
and what happens is up to fate
I can never truly know
exactly what people see
But still i wonder
What is my legacy?
Author notes
Im only 14 so im not quite sure what LEGACY means but i went off what i think it means and this is what i came up with =)
Hope you like.
A contest entry
- An AllPoetry Extravaganza-3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
3000 points, ended September 11, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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While there are multiple definitions of legacy, I think you do a great job expressing it from a younger person's perspective. I like the way that you convey the fact that even a young person looking forward also has a bit of past to look back on.
Hope to see many more writes from you in the future. Best of luck in the contest. -
At fourteen you have at least considered some possibilities. "Will I die alone with no husband to kiss will I live off affairs and brief moments of bliss". A legacy of a loving mother and wife respected and loved or that of a harlot. A well written poem that I enjoyed reading thank you. Best wishes in the contest and many blessings to you.
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Thank you for your entry into the Allpoetry Legacy contest. A very pleasant and nicely done write - wouldn't have guessed you were 14 at all, and a nice take on the subject. As Lisa said, keep writing and keep experimenting. Good luck in the contest.
Paul -
I can tell from this you're intelligent. There are some very deep themes & ideas in this. Nice work.
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Wow, this is amazing, for being 14 especially. You've created an entire person in your telling here, wonderful!
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At 14 the pen was my friend, keep writing and read poetry as well, it is a full world out there with so many different kinds.
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Thank you for your entry in the contest
You are doing a great job at 14. Keep on penning and good luck!
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Wonderful that you are evening picking up a pen and writing at 14.
Keep experimenting with all sorts of rhyme and non-rhyming poems.
Thank you for your efforts here in this contest.
Lisa -
You have described the want of a legacy in pride and in love, being so young you have much time to find what you truly want to share with the next generation. Well done. Love, C
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hey not bad i like this one keep on keeping on.
Jared Glenn
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