the clicking of the key-board
the scratching of the pen on paper
The flow of the words
off of silver tongues
and Golden fingertips.
This river running within me
is my addiction.
I'm an Addict called
Poetry
AKA
Music
know by
art
and the like.
Addicted to this beat
this flow
these words
how it gives me a go
and how my fingers flow
atop the keys
across the paper
into my heart an soul.
Change it?
Always
I'm always finding more,
new styles to direct my river to run.
Dirty-pretty
happy
freeverse
and rhyme
rap
rock
country
blues
it's all mine,
all in time.
Painting,
pencil
Grey black and white.
Anime
and Realism
((so difficult for me))
so I'm changing my addiction
to my flavor of the week
they rhyme of the day
and The stoke of the month.
Changing always changing,
yet always the same me.
Author notes
eeeeeee i like this! Your contest gave me so much inspiration, i was about to go eh, i ned to get back to cleaning anyways and then the first lines hit me and i was gone.
Thank you.
I'm going to assume Normal AP rules are to NOT reveal name if you can't see it?
lol I never knew what normal rules were since i've been in just about everything under the sun..... oh well.
A contest entry
- Addicted to Change by requiempoet.
340 points, ended August 10, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Poetry isn't a bad addiction though! so rock on!!! normal AP rules are the obvious ones. Don't act childish, use judgement on when to use erotica and such, limited to no profanity if it doesn't say so
A few suggestions
This river running within me
is my addiction.
I'm an Addict called
Poetry
AKA
Music
know by
art
and the like.
how about something like
This river
of ink
running within,
is my addiction.
The drug of choice
words and rhythm
Music and art
clash together.
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across the paper
into my heart an soul.
Change it?
Always
Pen flying across paper,
into my heart and soul
change it,
always
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I'm always finding more,
new styles to direct my river to run.
Dirty-pretty
happy
freeverse
and rhyme
rap
rock
country
blues
it's all mine,
all in time.
Painting,
pencil
Grey black and white.
Anime
and Realism
The river within
always exploring new paths
simply symphonic sonnents
to delicate strokes across canvas...
just some little things to maybe make it so...I don't even know the right word! but it's a great start!
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As much as i enjoy critisism.... That poem, is Your style. not mine. Mine is made the way I flow.... It is about my definition of MY addiction, not your definition of my addiction. I appreciate the tips and all, i simply find it insulting to change my entire poem into your own like that.
and my poetry IS a bad addiction, it only comea about when I'm feeling rather down.
also: Childish? I simply want to make sure nothing i feel to write for dosen't go out of bounds. Find me a link to a SET of rules, posted in the FAQ or what have you that defines 'normal' rules and I will gladly call my comment stupid and childish. Normalacy has little hold in my mind, world, or poetry.
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No they were merely suggestions, if you don't take them they won't affect your standing in my contest. I wasn't judging your addiction, I was simply saying that it doesn't have to be viewed as an addiction. I wasn't changing your whole poem, I was merely saying and giving examples to help the flow...if you thought it needed change, and obviously it doesn't. Most poets do write when they're down, I wouldn't call it an addiction, how about more of a catharsis. And the note about the childishness, you asked what the basic AP rules were, and I was simply giving you examples. They are basically a set of unwritten written rules that most poets on here know what I'm talking about when I say standard AP rules apply.
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XD nope, it's almost perfect the way it is *is sure some grammar or spelling is off Somewhere considering who wrote it* It's an Addiction when you can't stop, no matter how much you want to, somethign you can't obtain without a loss of self, for me anyways. and on the Ap rules....I'm clueless sometimes, help a sister out over here ^^;; Though I still think it was rude to call it Childish. but w/e.
and Basic is different for everyone. basic rules to some could mean, sticky caps, caps lock, and dirty-pretty are all ruled out, or it could mean to them, Go for all that stuff... That statement leave much to the imagination and perception of the Reader. It's almost not fair to say Basic rules, when there could be one thing that irks you and you don't say it, so someone writes like that and they automatically lose points for that... Rules prevent Perception from distorting a common reality... this is good in contest cases.
XD I can't believe you read these whole long rants I'm going on.....
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BAM!
Love it.
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Dude, I read the first line adn it was like..KABOOM. And I just got sucked in, and I read it so fast because I kept wanting to get to the next part, and yet I still got the good experience of it. That's killer.
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