The sunshine taunts me until I open my eyes
Leads me believe there is something to see
As I awaken to my apparent surroundings
The flashbacks returns and I long for my dreams
The pain I feel overwhelms my bloodstream
Disconnection removes my mind from myself
I drown in questions muffled by tears
Seconds pass as somebody else
A state of unconsciousness from which I cannot be removed
There’s a pulse but no response detected
With no form of defence I fall to my knees
All pleas of guilt and accusations accepted
Imprisoned with nowhere to run from my future
Revoked of all feelings, no means of escape
Years of tremors spill out in one moment
All the tears that reach my eyes fall fake
For as the bomb drops all I’m feeling is numb
A lonely cold haunts me inside
Hate is to strong a word but I severely dislike you
We're miles apart
But side-by-side
Author notes
One big mistake, that turned into an argument, which turned into heartbreak.
A contest entry
- Cold Regret by DesolatELifE.
689 points, ended December 15, 2007, 29 entries
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to be quite frank, I think this is rubbish. That was a complete lie.. Seriously, I love this! It's such a bloody awesome poem.. excuse my limited poetic commentry.. But wow, what a frikin good poem! I especially loved the first stanza.. terrific. Thanks For Entering!
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"We're miles apart
But side-by-side"
Love the way you ended it. Captivating write- I was hooked while reading it. Some of the wording you used was really awesome.
Ps... Im from Wales 2.. YAy us lol.
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I must say, you used some very compelling word choices in this piece that really made this stand out to a reader. Great job.
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