I’m playing on words [dancing on these cliché phrases]
& spilling my heart through this pen;;
communicating through dirty looks & shaky silences
& realizing for the first time
that I’m nothing more than a failed attempt to fade out
before everything worthwhile fades away;;
so cross these i’s, baby
& dot these t’s--
mix it up like you always manage to do;;
[you seem to forget that I like it twisted.]
but I won’t hold that against you,
if you promise to press :everything: into me--
a little against-the-wall-forgiveness always does the body good
[&this frail frame is aching for a pleasant time--
I’m just begging for one precious moment to forget;;]
(can’t you give me that?)
Author notes
for Andii: dirty pretty & the picture made me think about this- "against-the-wall-forgiveness"
WahrZuMir22 ♥♦♣♠
A contest entry
- Dirty Pretty by Lj-.
420 points, ended August 2, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything. by Andii.
600 points, ended September 15, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked:
"realizing for the first time
that I’m nothing more than a failed attempt to fade out
before everything worthwhile fades away;;"
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck. -
oOo. I really like your poetry, you are a very good writer!
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i love all your poetry , i just love that you dont use any cliche and its soooo beautiful i admire your poetry xoxoox
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[&this frail frame is aching for a pleasant time--
I’m just begging for one precious moment to forget;;]
how the heck are you so great at describing how I feel?
your writing is quite lovely. -
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ahhh unfortunetly it's how I'm feeling too.
SUCKS, EH? <3
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OMG!! I love this poem...its sweet..and I really love the words in it that just make it 10 times better
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aww thanks babe! & thanks for the applause!
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mix it up like you always manage to do;;
[you seem to forget that I like it twisted.]
Well done* -
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thank you very much!
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