in dreams, she jumps from skylines
falls-
cheek against pillow
( his fingers
reach right-through )
& she barely has a thing
to wear
now her skin no longer fits
...
Author notes
Prompt: Optical Delusion-
In dreams, we can remember them, but even ghosts can't save us.. they are really just optical delusions.. and when we are stripped bare with grief we are nothing more than ghosts ourselves..
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A contest entry
- Pay It Forward Quickie by CitrineSunrise.
450 points, ended July 30, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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hmmm... interesting. i wonder if this and the next one are both about the same person.
beautifully written. short - but it says everything it needs to say.
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makes me ache.
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'she barely has a thing
to wear
now her skin no longer fits'
wow that was striking.
<33
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excellent imagery and writing
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I hope you'll enter my s&v contest
Hugs..
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Loved the metaphor and imagery.. very poignant poem.
Congrats on your well deserved gold.
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This is a very powerful write, and I could feel the pain in every word. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Your prompt is: OPTICAL DELUSION. Please do not respond to my comments until the contest is over. Good luck.
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