OH I DO LOVE MY DREAMS
You cannot see me, standing here in the shadows, and you couldn't see me when I crouched down in the dark,
I’ve followed you everywhere, here, at home, oh and again in the park,
You don’t even notice me, when you’re alone, or in those special quiet moments,
You spend on your own,
But I’m always there with you, watching and waiting, for that slim little chance,
For you to have my special embrace, the one that will make you, wriggle and squirm, in that unique little dace,
The one were you're voice, makes a sound, like a song yet unsung, and chest starts to heave, to get air in you're lungs,
A forlorn hope of that, if I’ve got it right, as my hands squeeze so gently, but ever, ever so tight,
Oh but I don’t want to end you, are you insane, as I want to do it to you, again, and again,
You still cannot hear the sound of my feet, over the sound of the base drum beat,
But to you I have ceased to exist, but I am there, like a ghost, like a phantom and I’ shrouded in mist,
I am there where you can’t see, yes I’m there believe you me, I was there with you yesterday, I’m there where ever you go, guess what you clever, clever thing I be with you again tomorrow.
Author notes
option 5
A contest entry
- Just a few twisted options *new option + unlimited entries*... by AutumnsFlame.
450 points, ended August 2, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was.... okay.... in my opinion. I REALLY think you should make the lines shorter and put a background on this. THEN it would have a mood and be easier to read. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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thank you for being kind, you didnt like it really did you? i havent been doing this long and i tend to write how i feel at the time, dont worry i wont slash my wrists over it. but i will go and eat worms,
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Don't be hard on yourself. Just keep writing. There's always room for improvement!
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