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desert willow:

I drum a tattoo on your heart
of letters undone and
words that hide
amongst the roving clouds.

The desert punctures my willing toes,
enters through my shifting pores,
absorbing the city from
my simmering blood.

You stand tall and proud as
the great palms, waving your
soul against the fainting breeze --
an oasis for this
barren body.

Your breath - soft and weary
on my neck
like the touch of the early
sky upon my sleeping shoulders,
a drowsy blanket of dawn.
You tremble, a mirage between my
thumbs, a slender Mimbre leaf
suspended in the thick air.

You are the stacatto beat of my
heart, quaking to the sound
of your footsteps in this
wasteland.

I lie on the dunes,
enveloped by endless sand
and the stretchmarks of the skies, pregnant
with loneliness.
Illusions of rainbows dart
amongst the winds,
as colors I've never known
fly through your messy morning hair.

Floating palm fronds caress my
unconsciousness, as I drown in
dreams of awakening
within your
thirsty world.

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Option 16: Love

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  • saartha
    September 3, 2007
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    Ah, lovely. Your imagery is superb. Thanks for the submission.


  • Katilina
    August 30, 2007

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    There is something almost trinbal about your poem. I wish it was set in chaco canyon. I am thinging of the wrong kind of desert, I know. You have some great images too. I also like the context of your piece.


  • Epilogue
    August 30, 2007

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    "waving your
    soul against the fainting breeze --
    an oasis for this
    barren body."

    "You are the stacatto beat of my
    heart, quaking to the sound
    of your footsteps in this
    wasteland."

    "enveloped by endless sand
    and the stretchmarks of the skies, pregnant
    with loneliness."

    Just some lines i really like. Very unique imagery. I couldn't stop reading it. Your words were so lovely, filled with emotion. It was like i could really see the imagery and understand the metaphor as if i were inside it. Thank you for this lovely write.
    ~elizabeth~


  • cali951
    August 22, 2007

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    This is a good poem I did read the whole thing but I'm DQ it and you can enter another poem if you like but this poem just doesnt keep my attention.But I will not down you or your poem because you took the time to write or type it thanks for entering my contest


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    this was a wonderful write on the option and it made me think
    it was ll of imagery and emotions and i could feel it when reading
    this was wonderful indeed
    well done

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