I am the ghost of spilled ink
From many centuries past
I know all your secrets
I can make your horrors last
Though I have no voice to speak of
Nor tongue inside my head
I can make your memories live again
I can fill your heart with dread
I am the ghost of spilled ink
From centuries ago
From within my inky depths
Your darkest secrets flow
There is but one way to destroy me
It never shall be found
For though my curse is heard by all
I do not make a sound
I am the ghost of spilled ink
From centuries of old
All you ever write by hand
Are secrets I am told
All the things you ever penned
Are etched inside my brain
Your sorrow is my happiness
I'm hungry for your pain
I am the ghost of spilled ink
For centuries to come
I can see what's in your future
And I alone can do the sum
If you give me stories now
Your debt will soon be paid
But hesitate no longer for
Payment cannot be delayed
I am the ghost of spilled ink
Your blood runs through my veins
Black as night, black as ink
You feel those forgotten pains
Author notes
wolfcub
I had the idea for this whilst I was walking this morning, and it all formed in my head. I wasn't expecting it to be so long, but it all just flowed (and if I didn't write it all down, I'd have the ghost to answer to, wouldn't I)
The basic idea is that he remembers all the things you ever write down in your diary or blog or secret notebook etc (all your deepest darkest secrets). He haunts your life, making you remember them, but if you refuse to feed him your pain and suffering, he will consume you and make you live the pain and suffering of everyone else.
I don't generally write peotry like this, but as I said, it formed straight in my head, and flowed perfectly onto the page. There are a few areas that I'll look at again soon, but I'm reasonably pleased with this result!
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"I am the ghost of spilled ink"
Very nice. The rhyming is well done and I am not generally a fan of rhyming. -
Good idea, this's creative.
Kind of what i'm looking for.
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
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GloriousGift
Heba -
Thought I have no voice to speak of Nor tounge inside my head, I can make your memories live again, I can fill your heart with dread.
Those are very, very good lines. I love this, and don't worry about the length, I think it works well in this poem. Thank you very much for your entry into my little contest, I will be adding this one to the finalist list
Great work!
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Great poem. Very well written and full of brilliant thoughts. Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Yes, although this poem is average and does not employ enough poetic device the rhyme and flow are well done and there seems to be more to hear behind your thoughts, so lets see if you can bring it with the use of metaphor, imagery and some other captivating poetic device in future rounds.
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No
This, to me, was an average poem that lacked much poetic device although the rhyme was consistent throughout. Sorry.
La x
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Yes
I realllly had to mull over this. I can see you going somewheres. I just enjoyed the thoughts & ideas that you were able to display in the piece, & I have a strong feeling that if you display all that energy toward poetic devices you really good go somewheres. Not to mention your pro with unforced rhyme & flow. So I do see potential. But I have to admit this piece was weak & I really almost said no. But I want to see where you can go. Please await the other judges responses patiently. Thanks; Ryan. -
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Although you do have consistent rhyme, and succeed at attaining "mood" with this piece, I didnt notice some of the other elements we might be looking for in the contest. Sorry. -
congrats!
and well written so it is deserving of gold I usually find repeated lines a little ..well anoying but they worked so well with this, great idea behind it and the images are wonderful. love the ending,
"A lifetime of being haunted
By the secrets you told me
Is better than feeling other's sorrow
Trapped inside me for eternity" but this has to be my favorite, strong and beautiful!!
take care~ Michelle Fey
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I'm not usually a fan of rhyme at all, but I think you've just changed my mind. Your poem flows so smoothly, and is in a unique catergory on its own. The repetition works in this piece, the personification is amazing, and you do proper justice to other poetic devices. I thank you for entering it into my contest, If all the poems turn out as good as thing one, It's going to be impossible to judge.
The only stanza I didn't like was
"You tried to stop me taking
What was rightfully mine
I've taken payment now
Your blood has become mine"
It doesn't seem as strong as the other ones. I would give you a favorite one, but there are way too many for me to choose just one. Other then that, i abosolutely loved this poem, and after the contest I''ll be sure to add you to my favorites.
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Kind of creepy...I feel like my pens are going to come after me while I sleep tonight lol. Great idea, though...I think it plays off the idea a little that even the most private of all personal diaries never remain private forever. I mean look at Anne Frank - you think she meant her diary to be read by 90% of the world population?? I like that the "ghost of spilled ink" haunts pages, and really only feeds on the things that are bothering you too. Nice touch. A couple of suggestions, if you feel like looking at them...first, your rhyme is spot on, but your meter is all over the place. Sometimes it's regular and sometimes it's skippy. I don't know, for some reason that's something that rubs me the wrong way...but not everyone feels like that lol. The end of stanza 5 and the beginning of stanza 6 have the exact same line...there are actually a few places that make this feel a little bit repetitive sometimes. I wonder what would happen if you tried to pare it down a bit, maybe even end at "meet again in hell" (that sounds like such a finality lol). The only other thing I'll say, and I'll keep from saying much because I always seem to be saying this to everyone...think about punctuation. Please? Anyways, enjoyed the read. Cheers!
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This poem has a deep feeling and the emotion just screams at me. I can't resist it's pull on my mind. I know what it is like to experience that haunting feeling and the force that compells me to write at certain pionts in my life. This is a good poem that every poet should read so that it may draw out our inner self out and onto tha page. Keep writeing like this and you could become well known.
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dark, insistent, inspiring! I thought it was absolutely fantastic. It reminds me of the darker versions of fairy tales, bearing truth and horrors while being specially honest in perspective. It flows so easily and swiftly yet is abrupt and drawling. I dearly enjoyed this poem of the most amiable nature. Now forgive me for speaking like a pompous twit. Alas, I do love this and it has an excellent title, too.
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haunting, rich & absolutely wonderful
haunting,rich and absolutely wonderful, what I wouldn't
do to have those old childhood diaries back!
You scared me too...that was wonderful you balanced
the dark and the flow suspenseful and gracefully
Thankyou for sharing will learn from this poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Very creative It's nice to read something different now and then good read
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And for that this was wrought and maintained in a very meticulous manner, it really speaks out to all that walk within the sphere of the living in this present. You certainly penned with welll thought out lines, I really enjoyed, bravo! Rena~
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Nice! It is true that writing down things can "make horrors last" (But sometimes, it can help, too!) I liked the idea of the ghost that will haunt you if you don't write down what's on your mind... The 3rd stanza is my favorite.
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Very nice! I greatly enjoyed this original piece. I don't think I'd ever thought of my pen quite that way before. I see I'll have to be more careful in the future!
You have a lot of very smart thoughts running here and I like the way you put them.
How true that 'spilled ink' can make our memories live again! That's quite a thought, actually.
Thanks for the lovely read and keep up the good work!
-Hannah
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