The Spanish dancer dances to the rattle of the castanets
While steel guitars talk of the moon
Of old-world hopes and regrets….of old loves and “never forgets”
Her skirts swirl and her brown thigh flashes as she spins
She dances in the watchers eye
The dancer dances not for pins….she gambles and she wins!
A contest entry
- Let your pen run free! by silverscent.
450 points, ended August 5, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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John
Spanish? "Steel" guitars? Where was this?
Just curious! Liked the poem!
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Beautiful...love the picture you write, can see her dance...mary
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good
nicely wicked
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brown thigh,eh? last time i saw was white thigh, LOL
I like this rhyme : Of old-world hopes and regrets….of old loves and “never forgets”
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The Spanish dancer dances to the rattle of the castanets
While steel guitars talk of the moon
Of old-world hopes and regrets….of old loves and “never forgets”
nice first part your pen must have really been feeling the rhythm here -
Poetry in motion
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This was short though quite whismical. I'm not sure I liked "dancer dances" it's a bit obvious and ill off the tongue. It was nice though. Thanks for entering.
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Filled with senses - hearing, seeing - like the flow and the rhythm and rhyme in these lines - Spanish dancers are lovely to watch -very fast and flowing skirts as they twirl. Vivid visuals in these lines - easy to read and understand.
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Beautiful, exotic poem where you can read the words and they bring up images of a dancer and guitars and whirling and love. They all fit together into a "pen run free" way. Good luck in the contest.
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Beautiful
I saw the dancer as if she were here in my living room . Very vivid and great job!!!
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Steel guitars talk of the moon...Her skirts swirl and her brown thigh flashes as she spins...This paints a beautiful dance and your words sing for her...beautiful my Shadow Keeper as is your heart
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Beautifully descriptive
Your words are very lyrical and bring the lady to life, I can see her skirts swirling and hear the guitar.
All the best in the contest
Suzie Q
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