this piece is fiction, but based on a true story..if you all remember it happened i believe in CA, or one of the states anyways hope yyall enjoy it...wish me a good luck in the contest.....love
Underneath..................
Underneath the evil building
I send you my smile
The world fell my pain for some miles
You abondoned me but in
my face I keep the smile
to the sky I look, staring eyes so wild
trying so hard to understand
and to my miseries i awake
underneath..............
is where you left me to die
I am here mother, still breathing
down where you left me
underneath………………
underneath the basement
where no one or I can’t see
down there is where I question
my self and all that sorounds me
underneath there is where
you abondoned me
moody and sad
incredibly, I am possibly
Absolutely Alone
Doors shut sealed
As the night draws in the darkness
I hunger for some light to see
Suicide is the only thing
left in my mind to be
to leave this world, leave my life
to cast away the pain to bless this day
to feel no aching any more
no earthy sorrows
to have my soul depart my body
to eternal life from this horror
to live in peace laugh
with angels til tomorrow
Though you caused me the grieve and pain
I will forgive you mother, for my father
For my sisters and for my brothers
Their memories in my blood stained
Now my life flashes slowly before my eyes
Reminiscing when you used to feed me all of the lies
Lusting for more of your love I fell for it all
So my love to you is all I give to thee
Your face painted everywhere I turn
it flashes there you are I see you
underneath......................
In a list
A contest entry
- Start with Darkness...End it with Light by LadyLavender.
750 points, ended July 30, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abuse and Sad Stuff by Janice M Pickett.
400 points, ended September 7, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 25 trophies or less! Enter! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended July 19, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
okay out of the blue but tell me the trith how did i do...?
Comments
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Very sad, but I know a lot of Canadian history is full of murder and abuse and secret hidden bodies under floorboards. Creeps me out, but fascinating stuff to write about.
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yup
I know, there are a lot of stories around the world that could relate to this poem right here, you are right it so sad though that certain mothers would do such a thang, well we aint all the same right, well thanks for your comment
***HUGS***
thelegend
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There's talent underneath
Interesting write, but needs to be cohesive. The underneath you describe, that very chamber of pain is an awesome idea. Needs work. But, I see the talent...underneath.
LL
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thanks
thanks for the opertunity and the chance to write a new writes, i mean its a fantastic way for one to improve on their writes and poetry structue..again thanks for the chance to show my face out there..nice work.....God bless you too mummi
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