Passion's
playful sands
passed through
narrow curve
to hollow
building there
mound of awaited
gladness
with grains
of flirting fondness
tumbling down
ever-rising slopes
of yearning expectation
but hateful circumstance
or destiny's
gentle nudge
intervened
and sorrowed sands
somehow seeped
in rhythmic dissipation
through hole
in bottom's
precious keeping
Author notes
Prompt: Empty Spaces
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie, 30 minutes, 10 entries, 50 Words. Beat The Clock! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended July 30, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [[ Unrequited Love and a Longing for You ]] by ThatONEweirdChick.
602 points, ended September 24, 2007, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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congrats on the gold. well deserved. wonderful poem.
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Very nice. I may not fully get the meaning but I understand it enough. Thanks for adding it
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your words flow effortlessly, just beautiful! makes me feel happy
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NICE JOB!
Very impressive work of poetry. Nicely crafted and a emotional as I read this. Thanks for presenting this piece. I really enjoyed it!
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this is beautiful. no wonder you won gold! great job %!
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Beautifully written, I loved the phrasing in this one and the gentle sadness
Hugs, Bunny
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Your prompt! "Empty Spaces"
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