The echoed cries
and muffled sounds
They've all been heard before
Every night it happens
a lonely symphony
Only for them to see
He shouts, she tears
the lies abroad
They all come out
Its all so hard
Forever a night begins again
Again the sounds begin
And here we go, on with the show
Oh what a painful symphony!
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Written by : Rain86
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Very often the only way a child can respond is to interfere in an emphatic manner, such as setting a fire or hurting themselves. This is a terrible and depressing condition. I am impressed that you could capture its nature and express it so well.
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woah.. that was an original take with the word prompt! definately fun to read because of it!... but sad.. and very powerful. Good job.
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Excellent
Briefly stated in simple words this unending conflict between spouses, a common theme in modern day conjugal life, is so intense. It is straight from the heart and touched my heart so deeply!
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What an eerie sound.... this pain depicted in a symphony heard nightly... chilling. Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest.
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A sad write..
Reminds me alot of many nights of my past..
Peace
Best wishes with this enty..
~A~
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Do not think I would want to listen to this symphony very often - you have described it well and it does seem very painful for sure. Liked the flow and the way you have made this seem like a drama we are watching on tv. Easy to read and understand as well. Remember the apostrophe in It's all so hard...might also want to use another word besides begin in the second line of the last verse, as you have already used begins in the first line of that verse. Keep writing...
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