We watch-
as the creases
of black clouds
fold in like eyes slits-
dirty ice blades
fall from above
[& they use "cat's & dogs"]
slicing the skin
that we took every breath in
the midnight catastrophe was exploding before
our thick framed glasses
[thank goodness, I'm a -5.00]
I stare
at your eyelids that creased
like a old
leather couch;;
& your eyes shoot painfully
into mine
[like the stabbing of a traitor]
we were congested in our romantic dates
of gazing at intricate sunsets
& connecting our lives to meloncholy tunes
what we labeled "love"=
a traffic jams sitting at 6 p.m
distant shouting & using our
tongues like sailors
kids, we are.
just kids with no fucking lives...
Author notes
i have no idea.
A contest entry
- Wow me before Midnight by amaranthine lover.
600 points, ended July 30, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i think your my new favourite poet this is another pure amazing write by you i love i
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what we labeled "love"=
a traffic jams sitting at 6 p.m
distant shouting & using our
tongues like sailors
what we labeled "love"=
a traffic jams sitting at 6 p.m
distant shouting & using our
tongues like sailors
I love the connectivity of the twists of this great
write and that is the real strengfth of this write my friend..thanks for sharing it with us.. -
I like you abtractness in this piece
well used
I liked this in an interesting way
thanks for entering and keep on writing
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