Heaven is a beautiful place it is our home,
Where the angles walk full of grace beside God they roam.
From the Sandy shores to open doors,
From up above he watches for you he adores as you go on and explore.
The sky so blue for ever our love grew,
His heart so true his love spread to me and you.
Heaven is we belong you and I knew it all along,
Listen to the angels song their inspiration makes us strong.
The sunshine rays of glow he cares for us so,
We feel his love from below because it always showes.
He guides us on our way each and everyday,
Never leaves us astray heaven is our home to stay.
A contest entry
- Show Me Heaven by Jadon.
600 points, ended August 2, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful write
I truly love this one its so true indeed -
Very good
I love this one for it is a place where true life begins -
It sounds like Heaven to me! Beautifully written piece. Keep up the great work!
~Donna~
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Thanks for reading.
I pin up an older poem to my page called sitting in the clouds It's One of my favorite poems I have ever writen I would like you to read to read it.
Amber
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This is a beautiful.I hope that heaven is truely like this thank you for sharing this piece with me.Best wishes and blessings
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Thank you for reading I'm glad you like it.
Amber
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Beautiful
I love poetry like this for its like a fresh spring breeze sifting across my face -
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stories untold
Thanks for commenting once again.
Amber
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So many beautiful sentences you have there! Very peaceful write. Love it!
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Thanks for reading.
Amber
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"our home to stay"!
The first thing I want to mention is my appreciation for the way you spaced the lines of your poem. Your presentation allows each thought to be considered seperately before moving on to the next reinforcing line.
Interesting, your choice to have an internal rhyming scheme as well
Most imoportant are the thoughts you shared of love associated with our heavenly home. Freedom, encouragement and growth are essential elements of your heavenly vision. A home I could enjoy returning to as well. Thank you for sharing of your vision. Jadon
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Thanks for reading feel free to read more.
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Thank you for the invitation. When I have judged this contest and know who everyone is I shall drop by. Jadon
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your welcome.
Amber
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So true indeed this
Such a lovely write and I know here on earth we all need to bring such love to our homes to see the afterlife and the joys ahead
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thank you. Did you notice I tried to have two words in each line that rhymes I thought it be a little different.
Amber
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