Beautiful butterfly
gotta catch this one
if I don't,
I'll cry
after so long
and long it has been
caged you are.
the bars,
my fingers.
it isn't wrong
if it's love
there is so much to do
and every night I wonder
will you ever escape?
your beautiful colors
I adore so much
need to share you
with the endless world
make them feel
this wonderful feeling
you could capture a nation
make them fall
make them follow
purify the world with your beauty
with my sorrowful heart
I seperate the bars
placing my hand out the window
ever so gently
your beauty graces the yard
moving down the street
and next stop is the end of earth
missing you so much
all for the greater good
can't sleep
very restless
every waking second
breaking my heart
until that very second
where upon my window you sat
------- and I'll never finish
Author notes
So every second ..... ah forget it.
A contest entry
- No Brainer by Wind Walker.
375 points, ended August 4, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything that'll make anybody happy! by FindinSoundInSilence.
474 points, ended July 7, 2008, 64 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
wow! this was sweet ! made me think.-...
-
Breath taking
Could almost not breath while reading - nice
Good Luck in the contest
B D
-
-
Thank you very much! It's not often that you will find some of my poetry that doesn't trigger the emotions: saddness, anger, hate, desire, or pretty much anything besides happiness. I'm glad you enjoyed it, I've been trying to put the beauty in my head into words for years and I beleive I've finally done it.
-
-
this was beautiful... and really sad. idky but it made me think of my grandfather...he died awhile ago and i never was really close tohim which i regret but it cannot do anything about it. but great write
-
all i can say is power, power, power. you need to use stronger adjectives and possibly more similies and metaphors and such, and then it could be amazing
-
-
it was sapposed to be 'sweet'
-
-
is this about who i think it is about??? ha. good job. I really like the way you put it. good imagery. keep up your good work! and hang in there!
Crimson
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
