So much time's been wasted
In pursuit of what's not there.
The fault's my own,
I should have known,
A mask is all you shared.
Yes, you've played this game before,
You play it all so well.
You act naive,
I don't perceive,
Your face gives not a tell.
You know the proper things to say
So I'll let down my guard.
You have a knack for slight of hand
While dealing the last card.
So now I finally see the truth,
You walking towards the door.
I've been outdone.
The game's been won.
Cards scattered 'cross the floor.
~Greg~
Author notes
This is written in a poker metaphor because it was a game of chance from the start.
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Absolutely awesome, your metaphors to a game of poker where one has to keep that facade up to dissuade the other players is amazing. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece.
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Thanks Blaze,
Yeah, it felt like a game of chance towards the end so poker seemed like a good metaphor to use.
But then many things in life are pretty much a game of chance, aren't they? *chuckles*
ttyl
Greg
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Excellent write. I like the comparison of this as a game. It makes for great imagery. Thanks for sharing and keep the pen flowing.
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Poker is very popular now wherever the event is occuring,
"a mask is all you shared" I liked that line, and the way you wove it into a dull romance.
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Thanks Ronn,
I wrote it in that metaphor cause that's how it felt at the time.
Thanks for the comment. It reminded me that I haven't been around in a while. (I posted that in July.) I need to get back to my roots.
I've been active in Storywrite lately. I'm an officer (fancy word for helper) in a couple of groups there now. I've just been popping by occasionally to see what was going on. And to see if Lori was back. I saw the topic about her. She's still away? I'll have to send her a note that I'm thinking about her.
Thanks for the reminder. I'll put up a new poem and start commenting again after the holidays.
I hope you have a great Christmas and New Year!
Take care,
Greg
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i really love the way you think
~sorry about this comment lol~
this poem is..wow!!
thank you for sharing
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WONDERFUL!!!!
Yes indeed life and people are a game in progress. I know I for one am tired of playing this game of pretend.
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Thanks,
Yes, life in general, and relationships in particular, are often a game of chance. There are no set rules to follow. You just go with your gut feeling and hope you are right.
We are often wrong, but then we also often find the right person where we least expect them. They are the true gift hiding in the shadows where we do not expect to find them.
It is indeed a gift to find them and then move on from there. Anything could happen afterwards. You never know.
Thanks for the comment. It actually inspired more thought on the matter.
Greg
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Lyrical
I just returned from vacation, a 5800 plus mile drive
to Las Vegas then on to the west coast to visit my brother; returning to Syracuse, New York. Your poem reminds me of the country western music that I had no choice but to listen to at times. I enjoyed the flow and the rhyme, of course we`ve all been there before.
Good job.......Bob#42
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Thanks Bob,
I hadn't thought of it before, but it does have a country kind of feel to it, huh? I don't really listen to country much but I like southern rock, which is much the same lyrically.
That's a long fricking drive man!
Greg
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this is insane! i love it. i dont know how many time i have used the metaphore of cards to get my point across. i love this
jess
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Thanks Jess,
Yeah, I've used it a few times myself. But in this particular case it truly fit the situation, unfortunately.
See ya,
Greg
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The feeling of betrayal couldn't be any stronger, and I really like the metaphor you've chosen. The sad thing is that occasionally the card shark is too selfish and self-absorbed to consider that he or she has been playing false. To that kind, truth is only how he/she sees it, to be manipulated as seen fit.
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Thanks Carrie,
Yes, you nailed it on this one. The shark and the small fish. Unfortunately I was the small fish in this case.
Damn! You had a better metaphor than I did!
That's not fair! he he
See ya later,
Greg
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