Don a mask of interest
Gaze on me like a blazing star
Listen to my wordless phrases
Nod as if you know
Beyond gilded bars, beyond shredded newsprint
Taste freedom from deep skies
Take the draught and drown in choices
Give me your core
Grant me passage into the valley
We shall overtake the scorpion, the serpent
And eat apple pies a la mode
Until the golden Throne is rusted
And everyone has a crystal home
And watch helices spiral
Becoming some new race
A tuck here, a snip there
A coat hanger here, a bullet there:
The killer of killers fries tonight
Electric oracle, sage of the line
Heed her cautionary tales
Carry the spray at all times:
Because the guilty look innocent
Because the perps look like regular you's and me's
Descend from your altar
One nail at a time
Face me, your supplicant
Address my concerns
Reward my faith
Love me, angel,
Shining beacon of the celestial abyss
Though your glance takes millennia to reach me,
I await
Author notes
Written September 3rd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- ObScure by RitalinSmoothie.
300 points, ended September 5, 2003, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like this, it just jumps out at me. Very unique, great writing here. Love the whole style of it, adds something to it.
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Amazing
Very nice. I think it can be taken a number of ways, which is what is so nice about it, people can help incorperate it into their own life and meaning. Keep up the good work!! -
Nice work. You have to read it more then once to really understand it all but Still a fine piece of writing!
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This is truly beautiful. I read it twice and got someething different out of it each time. I suspect if I read it again, I'll find something else tucked away in there. Very nice.
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You my friend have not gotten enough credit for you work here - There should be many more comments - This is wonderful! I simply adore how you play your words upon each other from heavy to light and back again - Very nice - I will try to remember to read more of your work when I have more time - Feel free to IM me and make me aware of anything you would like me to review/comment on or just see
I really liked:
"Descend from your altar
One nail at a time"
"Love me, angel,
Shining beacon of the celestial abyss
Though your glance takes millennia to reach me,
I await"
But really my dear - the whole thing is Simply brilliant - Best of luck to you in life and love...
AuroraMoon
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"Love me, angel,
Shining beacon of the celestial abyss
Though your glance takes millennia to reach me,
I await "- i loved the scenery of this poem, i love poems with vivid imagery. also this poem seems to have a deeper meaning to it at a second glance, thank you for sharing
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