Filter this contemplation
Breathing eternally
The adrenaline rush
Pursued in my rational psyche
The mind’s playing games with me
Is it the end of the world? Quite cliché
The pain resides solemnly
I wonder with eyes stretching through a heartbeat
Could it be that I’m being meager?
Curse the malice of this throbbing ache
The isolated hospital exists remotely
I’ve escaped at this juncture, the will’s departing
The memories…so horrid…so vile
I can’t endure this outrage! Hinder my innocence!
Must I discern the torture suffering inside me?
Did I earn the vague images gyrating from karma?
Fish out these unwanted and hideous scenes
My anticipation’s pleading for His mercy
China’s prospering wildly
Concealed there in secrecy are individuals
Their blood flowing in my veins
I miss them dreadfully for each second of reminiscing
Makes me float away from this despaired misery
Should I smile at this wonderful conspiracy?
The youngster’s laughter singing
Loudly like music, making my soul so tranquil
I must disembark my abode immediately
Home, is it sweet as they say? It’s so bizarre at its own panorama
The status of the world’s hunger getting inferior
Can I change the perception of humanity…can I?
Now I’m assembling the pieces with determination
Pieces like the resources of chess to defeat the main purpose
Or to say the principle of the opponent’s presence
Should I not succeed, I will be masked underneath
Below the wishes that I did not bestow
I pledge that I won’t consider indignity as a disgrace
The patent clouds hovering for darkness to transpire
Angel’s tears crashing heavily onto my deep eyes
The eyes filled with anticipation and calamity
Contradictory they are, I believe
It seems it triggered coincidence
For a stormy night to dwell at this time
The organization placed out immorality
Their constraints should cease, be stopped!
Please…smear the melancholy away
I’ve been framed by their schemes
The plots intended out so well
The trials weren’t expectedly rewarding
Are you taking pity on the complications created?
If you were in my shoes, would you understand my doubts?
Truth behold, this felt so much like déjà vu
Malevolence conquering my weak arms
Shaking from the pale brittle cold
The mist rising within my weary outlook
It’s forcing time to depart
Tomorrow… will these thoughts be unchanged?
Beefy strength traveling my senses
It’s so numb feeling so much like death
Such a tricky being with full of entwined toxin
The incandescence of justice will seek out sooner
You’ll see…
Author notes
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Chosen Option:
4. Write about isolation from society. Either physical, mental, metaphorical isolation.
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Wow, this is such a random freewrite. I mean it’s my first time to write a poem (a long one at that) about this kind of erm, suspense story adventure kind of theme XD
Anyway, it’s for the round 3 contest which I am glad that I got in
The poem is about a man who escaped from jail but he rests for a while to think deeply about his next move. Why was he in jail in the first place? It might have to do something about the government (which is the organization in this story) which made him go to jail even if he was innocent.
He will try his best for the world to attain peace! His wife is dead but he has a child who he loves so dearly along with his family (the child is the youngster that I was talking about here)
Then after thinking so deeply, the night was beginning to be in a bad weather that he finally started to rest for he had already decided what to do to save the world’s economy.
Yeah, that’s it, hehe.
I used all the words in the word bank which is this:
Option 3. Word Bank
1. Filter
2. Hospital
3. Fish
4. China
5. Music
6. Chess
7. Stormy
8. Organization
9. Shoes
10. Beefy
It’s my first time so yeah, I don’t know if it’s that good. Comments are gladly appreciated.
Thank you for reading this poem ^_^
In a list
A contest entry
- ROUND 3 ~ INVITE only please by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended August 5, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abstract Options For Bizarre Poets xD by KyleBerg.
1750 points, ended October 8, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Ok... to be honest i felt this was a bit all over the place and i found it quite confusing
On the plus side, that reflects the whole crazy person who is isolated theme 
The parts that made sense to me i found quite meaningful and powerful
thanks for entering, good luck
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hmmm.
thanks for entering...
it's not quite what i intended but i enjoyed reading it nonetheless. -
good job and thanks for entering
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The youngster’s laughter singing
Loudly like music, making my soul so tranquil
I must disembark my abode immediately
too much happiness,
but they are the true miracles -
there are a lot of really great lines throughout this piece. the line "i pledge that i won't consider indignity as a disgrace" is probably my favorite. after reading the explanation and then the poem again, it makes a lot more sense. the ending is a little boring compared to the tone of the rest of the poem. you have done a great job here and i believe it reflects that you care about world issues. thanks for the entry
cassidy -
Welcome to round 3 ~ Very Nice job... It's really tough trying to keep the flow and the storyline when you have a crazy list like mine. I wanted to make it a little difficult so I choose words I never imagined could be tied into one piece.
I especially appreciate the author's notes... it gives even deeper meaning. I'm impressed you stretched yourself by doing a free verse write. It's tough to try something new.
Zillion and myself will be discussing and review all the writes near the end of the contest. I wish you the best of luck... you really did a nice job especially with a word bank.
Good Luck
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This is your first time writing a freeverse poem? Well, the over all subject for the poem is very cool, since I don't read many poems about people escaping from prison. It's certainly an action filled little ditty though. However, with poemtry you don't need the little filler words that you would add in stories and songs. For example:
"The memories…so horrid…so vile
I can’t endure this outrage! Hinder my innocence!
Must I discern the torture suffering inside me?
Did I earn the vague images gyrating from karma?
Fish out these unwanted and hideous scenes
My anticipation’s pleading for His mercy"
This gets kind of wordy. I'll cut it down a bit, and see what you think:
Memories…so horrid…so vile
I can’t endure this outrage
Hinder my innocence
Must I discern torture suffering inside me?
Did I earn vague images gyrating from karma?
Fish out unwanted, hideous scenes
My anticipation’s pleading for His mercy
Most of the time, words such as 'the', 'and', 'for' and so on, are un-needed. Anyhow, I like where you went with this. Very original. Best of luck in this contest.
-Zillion
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