Oh father
I discern you as snow-white
bisecting jet blackness
demonstrating your affluence as mighty founder
materializing your duty as omnipresent blaze
exhibiting your empire as Savior
yet with restrictions of a embarrassed father
you procrastinate to split me
when you detect me as
a denominator of inkiness
Oh father...
In a list
A contest entry
- Soulful quickie...10x50x30 by kaibab.
475 points, ended July 29, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank God for his mercy...it is a fearsome thing to be in the hands of Almighty God...and you show his mercy clearly here with the reference in black and white...excellent contrast...another wonderful write, Poet. I would have given it at least a silver...Peace, Rhonda
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Beautiful take on the prompt...nicely done
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We rise in air
as soul' feather to quill
what awe we find
in father's breath
to swirl in magic filling fountain,
as snow-melt blushing birth
from mountain.
Lovely entry thanks so much
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You only have 33 words...you need 50...so you still have 30 minutes to fix this...
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