Stars shivered in the endless blackness of sky
Night washed over us
In hues of ebon dusk.
I loved him.
And maybe, sometimes, he loved me too.
I knew his silent eyes better than my own.
Partake hushed motions of love.
We kissed again and again in the iridescent dark;
Moonless heaven ablaze with lust’s lost spectre.
By morning he was gone once again.
Winter’s icy breath a memoir of his bitter warmth;
Evening’s onset an envoy of his return.
A contest entry
- True Feelings by live in love.
450 points, ended December 27, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Sad by LittleDecoy.
900 points, ended August 31, 2008, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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AH.MAZ.ING.
i loved this.. it was wonderful to read!
a great flow, great emotion..
it reminded me of a particular night in my life..
thanks so much for entering & good luc -
Nice like birthday cake so fresh and with frosting
Let's eat.
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This piece grabbed my heart!
"And maybe, sometimes, he loved me too."
Why is it that [I for one] girls will do this to ourselves?
"Winter’s icy breath a memoir of his bitter warmth;" And like feeling lonely is not enough coldness of spirit, Nature is cruel enough to ice the body.
Makes me think of the song "Must have been love" by Roxette.
♪♫"Lay a whisper,
on my pillow.
Leave the winter,
On the ground"♫♪
I enjoyed this immensely. . . . .
love
Becks
PS. I like the "moon" image the layout of your poem creates!!
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wow. there is such powerful imagery here. every line was amazing- so much portrayed through. I love the depth behind your piece- it was awesome.
We kissed again and again in the iridescent dark;
Moonless heaven ablaze with lust’s lost spectre.
simply beautiful work!
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I love the last paragraph it gave me chills. Feelings radiate from the words you have chosen. The love theme is a timeless theme to write about. It can gave out so many feelings that touches one heart. Great work.
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Wow,
You really express yourself good within your poetry, I can feel the write, and the indepth emotions you put together here, Well done, and thanks for sharing. Peace, Timothy...
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I really enjoyed this piece xRussian
and it left me wondering, Is this a dream lover?
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not so much a dream lover as an exasperatingly seductive induvidual who wont seem to get the fuck out of my life *grr*
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I really like this, this is a gorgeous piece, your imagery is amazing.
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Was nice!
To be calmed and then upset by love and passion...ah!!
Great read!!
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we kissed again and again in the iridescent dark;
moonless heaven ablaze with lust's lost sceptre.
wow yeah love the passion here its displyed with a great jazz rhythm, and although love can be breif sometimes they are way more meaningful than years worth of friction, so have no loss of your power if he would not return, for karma is a tricky thing, cheers for sharing -with a basil, snow pea and fetta sauce over homemade gnocchi and a glass of red -jas
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