Looking out
the window open as always
even the screens removed at night
suddenly a black pall
falls, light of sky and earth
extinguished
a dream or hallucination
which? you'll never know
as coming events cast
their shadows before them
within you
two birds with one stone
two deaths in one dream
Sky Fell
the song the clue
'What will I do with my life
when you have left me?'
Author notes
Song quoted in lines 16-17 and named in line 14 -- 'Sky Fell'
Please tell me what you think
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tragic beauty
Melancholic, and beautiful. A strange rhythm that intrigues me, I love the imagery, and the loneliness. A very poignant piece. Excellent.
~S.
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This poem made me cry when i read it this morning. the song it is linked to is very heart rending too, it's a well written song. the poem reads softly, oneiric, with beautiful sucessions of gently paced images with guillotine blade content.
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this as writen so very well
i realy like this poem
i realy like the part where you said two deaths in one dream
fantastic
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two deaths in one dream..extinguished...fear for upcoming loss..very good!
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interesting poem
I am from KY also. What will I do with my life when you have left me? It is the same question everyone ask sooner or later. My answer is go on!
Smile,
Judy -
Bravo
And such
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I love the flow of this, it reminds me of another poet on this site LezzieC76, you should check her out, I think you would appreciate her style.
You poem is amazing! The flow, and the breaking of the lines is brilliantly done! The imagery is amazing. I love the quote from the song, it pulls the poem together, but doesn't overpower your own style! FANTASTIC! -
enchanting
I like thie way you write.
Smile,
Judy
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Beautifully written Bri
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