Fallen
Whispers dying
Sorrow soon to follow
Bereft of love's sweet charity
A lonely spirit wanders endlessly
Shunning offers of sympathy
Drowning within regret
So hopelessly
Fallen
A contest entry
- Form Contest - Rictameter by Seeking Peace.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Fantabulous piece!!! Excellent rictameter you have penned here. A sullen cry to be heard!
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This is a fabulous rictameter, I love the contest and the easy flow of this, just the sort of thing I have been looking for well done
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
Karen -
You have written a very potent poem here, you have captured heartache & despair perfectly. Perfect form, best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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I like this poem. I have to point one thing out: isn't "beret" supposed to be bereft? Beret=hat bereft=deprived. (As far as my understanding goes). Otherwise, well done.
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wow this was jsut amzing and so full of emotion. i loved reading this it was amazing. i loved the shape and form aswell. well don and best of luck
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this is nice... i had to write something like this in class one time... i dont remember what i wrote but i do remember that i thought it sucked... ok besides the point, its a great write and its full of emotion (blah blah blah *a few things people who are too nice on ap would put* blah blah blah blah) ... oh i would put sum claps but i have negative 600 points
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awesome form I love this it is so beautifully written. Keep them coming. excellent.
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oh... so sorrowful-.- And i dont think the rhyming was intentional yea? (=
Nice work with rictameter.
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