I searched for you
in the middle of the night,
waiting,
longing for you
and desiring you
until the pain in my heart
consumed me;
you were lost to me.
A contest entry
- PIF +++QUICKIE!!!+++ 10/20/30 by PerfectImperfection.
525 points, ended July 28, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh Patty,
Is this what happens sometimes one just becomes lost inside although its not always the other person lost.
It maybe the very one feeling it through what they
are facing. Still they cant always feel or even cry through that pain of depression situations I guess it can take its toll thats what this surely reflects...
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With but a few words you have crafted something special here...very powerful!
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Thank you. I don't see you much, but I'm glad to know you're still around. Hugs, Patricia
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very nice poem indeed
kiss*
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Thank you, Sweetheart. Love, Grandma
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Cool, you got green...my favorite trophy color...too bad they don't have Moxie orange!
The poem fits the graphic perfectly. It has that same tragic hurt to it.
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Thanks, Yem. Yes, well, I'd like to have had another color besides green, but I'll take it.
Now, I'd still like to try that Moxie everyone talks about so much. 
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Damn! That was absolutely beautiful and enchanting! I loved the picture, it was also beautiful. Such a forlorn thought, given a broken kind of beauty.
Well done.
Write on!
~*~SP~*~
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short n full of emotion brill ...congrats on the HM xxx cheeky xxx
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"If they don't return, they were never yours to begin with." This is a pain that many people know. Often love means letting people do what they wish. This short poem has a strong image and a complete emotion.
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Tracking device. Makes people easy to find.
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Hi Sweetie.
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That's beautifully sad! Congrax on your HM. Isn't paing something else? ~sigh~
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*sigh* Yes it is.
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When will this hysteria over the 'quickie' end? I don't mean to sound bitter or like 'sour grapes' but I couldn't write in this form if my life depended on it. Good luck in your endeavor.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
ps. I do like the background and your message is NOT lost on this old romantic soul.
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Thanks, Leo. I've done about three or four of these. I like the old contests where one isn't rushed. There are only a few I'd do this for, and I agree. Besided, the winner is pretty much obligated to hold the next contest, so I pray I don't win the gold.
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Beautifully written, I know this feeling of loss and lost love...Best of luck...Scott
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oh what sadness a love story end in tears so sad yet so wonderfully written good luck
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WOW
Great take on the prompt.
Very powerful
Delila
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Quite a sad but well written piece.
Good luck to you with this one!
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Thanks, Jeremy.
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nice take on prompt.
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Thank you.
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Very nice description of the emotions beneath the surface of the picture. A beautiful longing, in wait. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Thank you.
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Beautifully written hon, i like this take on the prompt. Best of luck to you...Scott
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Your inspiration is now posted! Good luck!
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A hard bite or just a little nibble?
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Depends upon what I have to bite.
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*pondering that statement*
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Well hello, Good luck
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