Draped black mesh covering vibrancies,
pieces of puzzle vanished.
Corners hazy, mind disillusioned.
Separating beauty endlessly subdue,
spiralling images onto thinned canvas
Author notes
pod
A contest entry
- The POD ~* by Arkbear.
300 points, ended August 9, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your favorite picture inspired pt 2 by whispernthedark.
625 points, ended May 10, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a wonderful take on the picture. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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This poem really drew me in. I love the imagery and the sense of the unknown. It is the truth seen in art. Great job on this.
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great write! I really liked this piece! I can definitely see how it won a trophy! congratulations! I also really liked the picture you chose! Thank you for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!
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Thank you
I thought I'd go for gold 
. Your comment means so much thankyou
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a sensitive and imaginative write, and I love the pic - very expressive.
well done on your win.
rachel
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thank you
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Three applause
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Easily one of the most amazing poems I have ever seen!!!
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thank you so much that means alot to me thanks you
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Dang ~
In a mere ( 22 ) words, you blew me away ~
You took me into a whirlwind of thoughts & emotions,
not to mention the *Sit & Ponder* Affect is Flawless ~
I could say so much, but my scores will tell you more ~
Beautiful entry Poet ~
Good luck to you!
Bear ~
Flow 10
Topic 9
Depth 9.5
Theme 9
Feelings 9
Grammar 9.5
Presentation 10
Uncommonness 8.5
Sit & Ponder Affect 10
Ability to follow Rules 10
Bears Score: 94.5
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My goodness!
What an amazing picture... and what an amazing poem.
The imagery and visuals that are painted here on this small
'canvas' are quite breath-taking.
My only gripe is the word 'endless' -
All your other word flow effortlessly together and then I stalled on that.
Would 'endlessly' not be better? Or is there some specific reason
why you did not use that in the first place?
Other than that, I cannot fault this piece for originality and freshness.
Thank you for following the rules.
I would like to see this go to finals.
:)
~crisstiena~
Flow 8.5
Topic 9
Depth 8.5
Theme 8.5
Feelings 9
Grammar 8
Presentation 9
Uncommonness 8
Sit & Ponder Affect 9
Ability to follow Rules 10
criss’s Score: 88
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I never thought of using the word endlessly, it would sound much better with endlessly rather than endless thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I do have to admit i would love to see a poem of mine in the finals i have been working so hard at my poetry that past few month it would be an honour thanks again
stacey
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mind disillusion, close to being abstract, but its not, nice
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nice poem showing how you feel about a picture
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Very nicely done. Thank you for your entry.
Soulful Woman
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