every time as middle winter
in plum blossoms
flutter
downwards
and the trees,
from deep within
their heartwood, laugh
against the white
of landscape
and eye
again, you fall
with your laughter
into the year rings
of my navel,
a flowering month
comes alive
beneath
my skin,
and my heart plums,
rose-red
Author notes
Plum blossoms are the Chinese symbol for winter. They flower most vibrantly amidst the winter snow in January & February.
In a list
A contest entry
- Months PIF by Cat.
525 points, ended July 29, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Ohh beautiful. Beautiful. Incredible. Sigh~ I'm jealous. Love your poetry... and this is just awesome. Just awesome. Now i'm gonna go take a look at all your poems.
Candy
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I really enjoyed reading this seeing as my birthday is also in January.
I loved how happy you made it and it flowed really well.
Great imagery use and I loved how it was displayed.
Great write!
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Very beautiful poem. I like the way this looks. You write beautiful poems.
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wow... my goodness... this is
incredible poetry... so wrought with imagery and emotion...
that second stanza could stand alone, so much poetry contained within that portion alone...
BEAUTIFUL!
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There's a sparseness that suggests Japanese poetry (especially in the plum imagery) and at the same time a lushness and richness of color and image. Nicely done (as was your poinsettia poem).
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this is really excellent. there's a kind of cut up quality to it that someone less skillfull could have mashed up into nonsense, but you have made every part make perfect sense. I am particularly impressed by youre first verse--it doesn't flow solidly, but kind of flutters together as you suggest in your third line. You deserved that gold!!!
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Ok...someone has winter on the brain! he he! Another beautiful penning, I see you are collecting Gold lately
As it should be ~Tia
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Thanks, Tia..lol, I think winter stayed on my brain!!
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Beautiful.
Such a sweet poem, I love flowers!
a flowering month
comes alive
beneath
my skin,
Lovely.
I guess that makes you the winter rose. -
Nice
Very soothing write here and yes I know of the plum blossoms so beautiful indeed
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great read this is subtle and lovely this flowed really well and i liked the layout good job poet
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a feeling of life springing up in the natural world becomes a feeling within the heart and mind. So very nice, expressing a wonder of nature and a wonderful feeling...PK
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So well deserved dear Nicolette of your gold, this is a priceless gem of soft poetry that I have come to know and love from you. Love, C
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Your words were enough to entrance me and then your notes provided the icing on the cake.
I enjoy reading anything that gives me a glimpse into the writer and this little look showed me someone with a deep appreciation of the world around her.
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What can one possibly say to display the feelings he got when reading this poem. I'd curse out loud but then you would know I'm envious about your writing skills
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Ohh! Your words could make me wish winter to last forever should my "heart ever plum rose red."
February brings on the cherry blossoms here midst gray misty days. They stun the senses much the way plum blossoms would in the snows of January, and are vibrantly fleeting.
Karen
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What is it in there that attracts the heart? Where flowers bloom or showers fall, what makes soup more warm in the winter, exquisite Nic.
that sounds better, I hate when you misplace an r....lol
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certainly another gold worthy penning of yours Nicolette. The plum thoughts of this piece are just stunning in their imagery.
I think what is most unique about this piece is that it calls to our attention the difference of season globally - as we would see a holly bush berries against snow, here in the U.S., with such a white back drop. Yet, in South Africa just now you are in your winter with cooler days as we would not expect (being in the 80's here this week.)
really a stunning write...
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Thank you for the lovely comment Kim. Yes, our winter's are so different. Last week we had temperatures up to 25C - and that in winter, yet this weekend it was cold - 7C is cold for us, lol!
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"a flowering month
comes alive
beneath
my skin,
and my heart plums,
rose-red"
I love that....'my heart plums'.....this is so beautiful,
every word! Congrats, Nic!
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Thank you....I just hope my heart stays "plum"
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I would say I told you so! - but then that is hardly necessary, is it?
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LOL... must be my lucky day
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This is wonderfully done Nicolette, so much movement here...
al
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Thanks, Al...
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downwards or downward?
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Thanks, Mary. The dictionary says both are correct
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and this is why you are the smart one...and me.. not so much
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Not so smart Mary...just having to rely on dictionaries, lol!
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a flowering month
comes alive
beneath
my skin,
and my heart plums,
rose-red
i love the turn of phrase used in this ending- some lovely imagery through out -
Well this is simply lovely and one of my favorites of your...I love the soft feathered approach and hint of sensual wonder...,brilliant work
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January in plum... I can see white petals flying on the breeze of love... oh my, my poetic and sentimental heart do not allow me to write... Feelings are always beneath the words.
~Sonja~
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see... this is love...
not sure on the split of groundwards? it seemed to stutter a little ... maybe downwards? would be better
but still a beautiful piece Nicci... with dreamy symbols and a devotion to love and life..
and bellybuttons are divine..... ....
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Yes, downwards falls better on the ears. Thanks, Gilly
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Stunning. I love it!
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"a flowering month comes alive beneathmy skin,"
was my favorite part too. Great imagery.
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The plum blossoms seem to unfurl and to fall so gently down the whole page. Such a beautiful poem of blossoms and new seasons.....and laughter. Love this one. It had a smile pinned to it. Beautiful.
~Lyrical
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"a flowering month
comes alive
beneath
my skin"
Sighhh...Lovely, as always, my Sister. Your writing always provokes the deepest responses among your avid readers ~ this is one of the hallmarks of universal writing, my Friend; each one feels it differently, understands a separate aspect of each word. Beautifully done, Sweetie. Good luck in Mary's contest. Vlindertjie
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Beautiful. I ept coming back, waiting for something to appear and am gladdened to see, the waiting was very well worth it
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LOL...at last the blossoms appeared. Thank you so much...
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A sentiment I share...
Your easy flowing Poetic messages always stir my emotions...
"a flowering month
comes alive
beneath my skin,"
My Nicolette's (died, last year) birthday is also in January.
I thank you for this pleasant memory, Scribe.
~ Nicholas ~
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Aaawh, Nicholas... unknowingly we share more than just a name, my friend... Thank you so much...
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