She hangs in a hall alone
but all are drawn to her
Like a sweet sirens song
The paint could never extinguish
the fire in her eyes
though they are as blue
and deep as the ocean itself
Her hair flows
as freely as the water
and her smile is sweet enough
to melt even the coldest heart
You could get lost
staring at her
just as the painter did
so long ago
But the painting is always there
Her beauty preserved forever
Author notes
My first mermaid poem. Be gentle.
Mermaids are awesome!!
A contest entry
- Mermaids!!! Prewrites allowed!! by HugsForEveryone.
525 points, ended August 29, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nicely done, it made me wonder about the painter, as you brought him very close in the second to last stanza. Thanks for adding to teh reading list, a very pretty write.
~CharlotteRose~
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lol
i thought it was awsome!!......mermaids rule!!!
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VERY nice job I liked how with the 2nd and 3rd stanzas you said something like "And deep as the ocean itself" And "As freely as the water" Because it seemed as though they were things that were important to her. Great job. Keep up the good work. Good luck in my contest! Thanks for reading my rules!!
~Pandy~
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