Dear dad,
When are you coming back?
I haven't seen you in as long as I can remember,
And it feels like forever,
I think about you everyday,
And wonder if my life would have been the same,
If you had only stayed,
I dont blame you for the life i've had,
All I want is you, my dad,
Please come back some day,
To see how much i've changed,
Because to me you should be here,
I cant wait another 13 years.
Author notes
this is just a poem about how i feel about my dad..who i havent seen since my parents split up 13 years ago..
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I'm sorry =( My dad is in my life, though it doesn't seem so...every day I wish he weren't, but with the way he is it still has that feeling of loss to it...I have a "father" but I could never call him a "dad", you know?
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Oh wow,i can definately relate.That is great! Another amazing poem!
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All I want is you, my dad,
Please come back some day,
To see how much i've changed,
Because to me you should be here,
I cant wait another 13 years.
the pain of not having a father is hard on one -
Im so sorry
I know just how hard it is
Ive written quite a few poems about my dad
and one is the same title as yours
This is very sad but i can relate
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your poem is very literal and
self explanatory... it would certainly have been difficult for me to interpret this poem as being about anything else... I feel your author's notes are redundant...
in the contest rules, I state:
"simple: tell me about your daddy issues... I don't want to read about them in your author's notes, just in your poem..."
sorry, it's obviously a personal piece, but I will wait to comment further until rules are followed... -
It's really sad... But I guess I understand.. My parents also divorced.. More my mom divorced of my dad after we haven't heard from him in like a year or so...But he wasn't really nice anyways...
Still,it is sad when dads don't stick around.
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My parents split too, I still see my dad though, sometimes.
When he needs something or my mom gets pissed off, mostly.. but still I guess it's something.
This is really sad too, I kind of feel bad. Because I guess I should be glad I see my dad. But I'm not.
My brother was lucky, he got to move in with his mom and cut himself off from the mess. None of the rest of us could.
You sound like you need a hug.. *tacklehug*
Yes, that's normal for me =/
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Aww, this is so sad...and especially since it's a true story. Wonderful, tearful write! Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest
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my dad died when i was eleven, and i can completely understand your feelings. its must eb so frustrating to know he is our there somewhere. i wish mine was. ive written one or two poems about him, only one is on my AP site because i feel a little too personal aboutb them if you know what i mean?
anyway, nice write. youre quite a talented poet. -
Gone...
You're not the only one who has to suffer from the lose of a father who doesn't even care to call or stop by just to say "hi" to his kids. So I feel for you. My father left and left in a horrible way to. I know how it is, I know the pain he can cause. To see what he has done to me, read a few of my poems, most are about him.
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Wow, it is very deep, I am sorry that you haven't seen your Dad,
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thnx..
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Its honest... from the heart... meaningfull... i love it sweety and I'm sad... and mad at the bastard for leaving u at 4... bye sweety keep writing
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very deep and meaningful...I like it
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oh wow this is very deep I can relate to this in many ways I never really had my dad around he was always in and out of my life but I still want him to this day.
great write the emotion rolls off of this and goes straight to ones heart.
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