Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

My Love



It was spring
With flowers
My boughs were bending
I was heavy with honey
Around me
The bees were flying
Humming
Unending flattering songs
My honey was heady
Sucking to their fill
They lost their head
They became tipsy
Deliriously raving
In meaningless words.

The spring left
My flowers also shed
The boughs became bare
My friends of heady spring days
They also left
But what did they leave?

Autumn came in an afterglow
In glorious colour I was aflame
But when my leaves were falling
None was by my side.

Winter is here, bleak and bare
The woodland is lonely
Not only flowers
I am shorn of my foliage
I stand forlorn
Against a colourless sky
A cold wind is howling
I am sighing
And dreaming and wondering
What did I give
What did I get
In those days gone by?
---------------



















A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 12 of 12

  • Heavens Child
    April 19

    Edit | Reply
    A unique piece. I like the perspective you chose to write from and the metaphor is very well done. Best wishes and thank you for entering.

  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    February 7

    Edit | Reply
    the cycle of life and love can appear cruel and lonely....you have captured it beautifully here. Very creative. Well done.
    Rory


  • Lavender Butterfly gold member
    November 4, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    So creatively engaging... x

  • ReasoningsThreat
    May 11, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    It's defenitely a poem that makes you think. Thank you for entering.

  • CanadianGirl1
    March 24, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Thank you very much for your entry... I can feel everything through your words, and that my friend is an amazing thing to do... You have some true raw talent and it was definitely a pleasure to read this.. I look forward to reading more of your work.


  • Poetryintheblood silver member
    February 27, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Thank you for your entry and following the rules, good luck, Josie

  • WhenWillsCollide
    November 8, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    what a great way to express lonliness
    well done
    [i like the metaphor ]
    • karabi
      November 8, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      Thanks very much for the compliments.

  • Lauren Noir silver member
    August 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This was fantastic!
    It was uniqely written, it was really fantastic
    The nature devices were so interesitng and so beautiful
    It worked well to the poem and was really beautiful
    It was enchanted by the images created
    It was though provoking, and a breath of fresh air to thins kind of poem, it was unique
    Not only a descend from the nature but through seasons, that was brilliant

    It was wonderful
    Well done
    Good luck
    And thank you so much for entering


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 5, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Beautiful...sad...thought provoking. This is the only poem I've read today that made me sit back and sigh.

    Love, Lane


  • Ilma
    July 31, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    An interesting idea, very well written, the last stanza is very tragic, despite it being natures way and all best of luck
    • karabi
      July 31, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      Thanks a lot for reading and commenting.
1 - 12 of 12