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The Package

Comatose, he is
Regular,
Australian in the skin
He has butterflies for wings

He is native to this land
Clean, virgin skin
He loves cut women
And moans into the ditch

Clamours into the night
Loves to lust for the fright
He has clean, virgin skin
A raging body

Saliva, he is
Red, pumping,
European shins
He has serpents, metal wings

Turning blue in this land
Bottled water on his skin
Green grime for his two women
He is sulking

Tempted to choose pills
For tonight, lust, leisure
He has bronzed skin
A tempting body.

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  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 6, 2007

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    i enjoyed this very much it was a good read, loved the metphore within and i flowed well good job poet *smile*