I haven't heard that voice for such a long time.
But when I heard it today it started haunting my mind.
I miss you so much I long for your touch.
I tried not to listen because it brings back the pain.
But I can't help myself from doing it over again.
When you died it broke my poor heart in two.
But what else is this old lonely widow to do.
Just to hear you laugh and remember your smile.
And listen to you say my name for awhile.
I close my eyes and your here with me.
Holding me tight in my memory.
Author notes
I found a message to day with my husbands voice and I had to write this.
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This poem is such a sweet poem like I said before. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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This is so powerfully sad and beautiful.... I'm sorry for your loss but it's inspired you to create a wonderful piece to share your feelings with the world. Keep up the good work.
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This is such a sweet poem. It is good you at least have something to remember your husband by. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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WOW! I have a recorded message of my deceased soul mate's voice, telling my daughter he love's her and to tell us ( my son and myself) that he will be home soon and he loves us. He never made it home.
I love this poem, and relate to your every word.
Just one lil nit picky problem that will prevent this beautiful piece from being placed at the top of the list. You're vs You'er.
Thanks for taking the time to enter and good luck!
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This is a beautiful piece, very well written. Memory's have a nasty habit of appearing when you least expect it to, some nice, some bad. Good luck in the future!
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Wow that was sweet but I dont know if this is true but still a good little write and aww we live for the memories good luck in my contest
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I haven't heard that voice for such along time. <--- 'a long'
But when I heard it to day it started hunting my mind <--- 'today' - 'haunting' might work better.
But I cant help my self from doing it over again. <--- 'can't' and 'myself'
Just to hear you laugh and remember you smile. <---- I think 'your smile' might work better but 'to hear you laugh' seems to work but 'hear your
laugh' would as well. 'laugh and remember' -> 'laugh and remember' - Was double spaced between 'laugh' and 'and'
And listen to you say my name for a while. <--- 'awhile'
I close my eyes and you'er here with me. <--- 'you're'
Beautifully written I loved how this shows the emotion felt by you as you wrote it, I enjoy reading poetry that holds emotion and this does hold emotion. It is such a beautiful write and I am grateful that you decided to enter this into my contest and to upload it to allpoetry - thank you.
I can feel the emotion of you as I read it, it flows off the 'paper' and into my soul, beautifully done and beautifully written. Thank you again. -
Beautiful, it shows your pain and longing for your husband. And also all your love for him. Though you might want to figure out if your going to rhyme or not. Other than that, great write.
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this is a nice write you show your pain and loneliness in a beautiful way. thankyou for entering.
~Valen~
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So sad, the feelings are so strong, great write. I started a new contest and this would be great in it. If you want the link let me know, but anyway, back to your poem. It feels so bad when you lose someone. I lost my soulmate and the pain is terrible. I can relate to your poem. You sucked me in and I loved it. 5 stars sweetie. Awesome!
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