like a feather caught in a breeze I want the wind to carry me, take me to places I have never seen,soaring threw the air aimlessly.
Passing the birds that speak to me,floating by clouds,and blooming trees,making my way across the sea,like an unchained melody,poetically free.
traveling into space and time, greeting the stars that so brightly shine, resting upon a fire fly,as it collects me like a true ally,helping me continue to fly.
resting upon a wild flower,as the dew from the rain makes me smile,feeling as though hope is wide,as my misty fluff begins to dry
Oh how I wish I were a feather in flight,to explore the world in a different light,oh how wonderful this must be to meet and greet infinity.
A contest entry
- Options! Pre-writes OK!!:) by leopardleaf.
390 points, ended August 3, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Nature~ by Whispers of Hope.
300 points, ended August 12, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was a very thoughtful piece I really liked it Good Job, thanks for entering my contest!!
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thanks a bunch
thanx for the nice comment and for the silver,I am glad that you liked the piece that I entered.
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Wow, very nice!
Good luck
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thnx
thankyou for the comment,I am glad you liked it!
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This is great ..I am very glad I stoped in to read your work...This is such an adventure..I agree with you totally...In a different light.....that really got me...infinity. I want you to know the end of this brought a big sigh..if only??????? Mark
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thnxs again
I am so glad you stoped by as well your comments not only brought a smile to my face but also gives me hope that I have not lost it completly (concerning my writers block)maybe I can still write..and it reaches inside of me when I know that my poems may have put a smile on someones face or reached into them somehow....thnx again,this is a wonderful comment!!!!
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This is beautiful!! I love how you have captured imagery and poetic justice for something as ordinary as a feather. This shows true creativity and inspiration. Well done! I look forward to more writes!
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thnx
thnx for leaving this comment, I appreciate it!I like the fact that u pulled that out of what you read!!
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I love how you are so well connected with nature. To me that and love are the most inspirational things to be around. This poem makes me feel the breeze through your word choicing. If I may give a suggestion, try organizing your lines or stanzas a bit. But other than that this is a beautiful poem. Great Job!
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thankyou
I am glad you liked it,and I appreciate the time u took to read it and comment, and thnx for the heads up on the format, I will look into that more, it has been a while sense I have written anything,everything on my site is new!!!
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