in the warm evenings
a flashlight of fireflies
glowing
in a jar
only to be released
until tomorrow
in the mornings
a blanket of
dew droplets
on flowerbeds
of colored canvas
in the daytime
a playground
of kickball
a field full of cowboys and indians
water gun fights
pets watching
smiling faces
making memories
Author notes
Dragonfly40 --- Betsy
It was a great yard and I try to make mine just as wonderful !!! Fantastic contest idea!!!!
A contest entry
- Your Personal Outdoors by flight.
900 points, ended August 21, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I sure do like this!!!!!
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Wonderful
Very well done. What terrific memories.
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thank you !
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Ah , this was an awesome recall of memories.
I loooved the second stanza, that's such a neat image!
ah, and "flowerbeds of colored canvas."
this has got to be one of my favorites by you, great job!
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Thank you very much !! Glad you liked!
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Beautiful!
Just beautiful in the wording and images! Loved it! Seems like some of those old memories of catching and releasing the fireflies were some of the best memories of childhood. And I loved...'in the morning a blanket of dew droplets on flowerbeds of colored canvas.' So true early in the morning - the flower beds just glisten.
Great write!
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Beautiful imagery Betsy... I love that when you say "making memories" in this poem you were actually making memories... great job, good juck!
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Thanks Ryan
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Betsty I like this poem I love fireflies I needed my spirits lifted it reminds me of my short story dy the same name sterling
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Thanks Sterling- I wasn't feeling too well yesterday - got home from work and went straight to bed -slept until this morning.
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You are beutiful.I would walk in the rain with you anytime.Nice poem.It got me wanting to play again.
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thank you for the wonderful comment !! I'll play in the rain with you anytime!!
Betsy
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beautifully penned! i think you have done a great job capturing the outdoors! well written!
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Thanks!!! glad you liked!! Love the new face pic Betsy
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That really was a lovely entry.
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thanks!!! It took all of 5 seconds --- one of those that WAS my life back then and such a real memory pleasant to remember !! Thanks for reading!!
Betsy
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I agree fantastic idea! I love it! It's beautiful! I hope you win!
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Thank you Lemonhead!!!! I just loved writing this one!!!
It was so killer to remember that ! b
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