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no more stars

suburban filth
sheep to the slaughter
soceitys suicide
is this what we're living for?

living walking corpses
their stink of unreality
mentally murder
this is what we're living for

gunpowder exit
flash of sudden shock
no more stars
not quite living anymore

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a fanpoem

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  • SuicidalDownfall
    July 29, 2007

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    Verry Well Put together !

    I love how you put Words together and they just blatanley make sense, its a very good poem, you should most definltey not doubt your skills as a poet !!


  • -NeverMind-
    July 29, 2007
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    Very emotional and honest,
    I really like the imagery here,
    wonderful job


  • Sorath
    July 28, 2007
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    WOW

    This is the best ever. I love your words of truth, what is really so great in this world so far? It needs to change! My favourite line was: 'living walking corpses
    their stink of unreality
    mentally murder'
    It proves that I'm not the only one who smells their rotting flesh?