We wasnt together for very long
But when you decided we needed to depart
You took all the love I had given you
And used it to break my heart
I cried so long
My tears of pain
Being with you and holding your hand
Was all that was keeping me sane
You teased so decisively
Although I dont think that was your intention
With everytime your eyes left mind
I found myself begging for your redemption
I know you dont love me
Or maybe you do
But the need for you to touch my soul
Has long since been overdue
So now I ask you
The one that I most adore
Will you please take my heart
So you can break it once more?
Please tell me what you think
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I love this, especially since I can relate. It's like you love somebody so much, even though they've hurt you, and you know exactly how and why...You'd do anything for them to get close enough to you so they can do it again.
Lovely, lovely, lovely.
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wow, i love this! i mean LOVE it! i think you seriously wrote it for me! bravo bravo is all I can say!! It rocked!
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not to shabby
Interesting poem. Do the different line lengths have special meaning? If not, I may suggest evening the length out as I'm drawn more to the length of the line than the depth of the words. -
wow i kew it was going to be good but d***m
the way you put that brout me back to when i did the same it sux wors the secont time but it was for the best i like it your vary emostionl in you poems and thats y i like them -
Nice, I think i know who this is about. You and your little "emotions" of which i lack... well, I wish I lacked them... anyways... which is not a word... nicely done!! I like how you wanted them to break your heart once more, a feat very much not likely to happen again. You'll find the right guy, I'm positive. Much love, keep writing!
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