freedom lost
fire flies caught
in
glass jar
In a list
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you found the spirit if haiku..i'm not up with it all,,,you are such a gifted writer 'R'..hugs
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Simple and elegant. Conjures childish memories and new perspectives. The colors, perfect. The title, profound. Excellent piece.
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this poem completely encaptures the title with your strength of imagery in so few lines. the imagery of fireflies is just perfect - I think one of my favorites as it ties so many of us to our childhood.
simply wonderful Reenie...
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congratulations on your hm in this inspiring contest, sweetie ...
you're really good at those concrete haiku ...
maa
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This is a very nice haiku, you can picture the fireflies in the jar caught by children during the summertime. Thank you for a delightful entry.
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
freedom lost
fire flies caught
in
glass jar
This is a very nice haiku with the "aha" moment coming in the first line. The concrete form is also very nice. -
Beautifully done! Words with such poignancy to depict feelings of such fear!
A stunning piece. Good luck in this contest
Gaylene
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Nicely done for this contest. i like it, best of luck to you...Scott
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