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Tyme

I got a feeling she keeps me in the dark
I gotta keep my eye on her because she isn't any walk in the park

I'd offer this but she wants it--she wants it all

I got a little tip of words on the block I shouldn't get involved

But I don't judge and or try to change it because you are who you are

I'm like the drug she's addicted to me and she can't leave me now

She's always making plans to date...then find me a maker

(bye bye girl)

 

SHe's doing resting on the hours that pass her by

I'd pay attention if I thought it was worth the time

I tell her easy but her hands they find a way

Confusing passion for the laws we never gave

Fall back on reasons that we know won't stand a chance

Watching our shoulders like amemory from the past

I tell her easy but her hands they find a way

Confusing Passion for the laws we never gave

 

I couldn't get rid of her if I wanted

because she was down and I was tired of plaing the role like I don't know that she got around

Something about this girl fascinates me she's the type that likes to hang with the stars

The way she makes me feel and sedates me who knew we would take it this far

Everywhere I go she's gotta 'post-up' with my face on it

and as soon as I walk out the door there it is with a 'post-up' with my face on it

I can't blame myself and it's not my fault because there was nothing promised

At least I could say I was honest but bye girl

 

Shes Doing Resting On The Hours That Pass Her By
Id Pay Attention If I Thought It Was Worth The Time
I Tell her Easy But Her Hands They Find A Way
Confusing Passion For The Laws We Never Gave
Fall Back On Reasons That We Know Won't Stand A Chance
Watching Our Shoulders Like A Memory From The Past
I Tell her Easy But Her Hands They Find A Way
Confusing Passion For The Laws We Never Gave

Shes Doing Resting On The Hours That Pass Her By
Id Pay Attention If I Thought It Was Worth The Time
I Tell her Easy But Her Hands They Find A Way
Confusing Passion For The Laws We Never Gave
Fall Back On Reasons That We Know Won't Stand A Chance
Watching Our Shoulders Like A Memory From The Past
I Tell her Easy But Her Hands They Find A Way
Confusing Passion For The Laws We Never Gave

~~~bye girl

 

 

Author notes

Please, I worked hard on this one. The least you could do is leave a 2 star comment. And an applaud. But I'm not forcing you. (Loves ta everyone) (HEARTBREAK-6th OPTION)

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  • XpushXmeXagainX
    August 2, 2007
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    That was purely amazing. You have such talent.


  • Nightmare Hybrid
    August 1, 2007

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    Love sucks. Get a helmet.

    Just kidding. Good lyrical flow, I could feel some of the pain (maybe because I've been through it myself). Nice write. However, I found the font kinda of hard to read, just the style of it, not the color. Next time --- Let me know when you write a new poem!

  • Oya Ayaba Nikua
    July 30, 2007
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    Reads like a song...good lyrical flow. I wish you luck in the contest.


  • EmilyRoseFrank
    July 29, 2007

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    "I Tell her Easy But Her Hands They Find A Way
    Confusing Passion For The Laws We Never Gave
    Fall Back On Reasons That We Know Won't Stand A Chance
    Watching Our Shoulders Like A Memory From The Past"

    The flow and structure of this piece is outstanding.It's brilliant. Confusing, yes, but that's what we are. Humans I mean...there is no set rule or way to go...It's very heartbreaking...what else is there to say? Honestly it sounds like a commitment problem. But without rulse. What's there to commit to? Promises are for fools.

    But I love this. It has a "Beauty and the Beast" aspect to it...except you can't exactly figure out who the Beast it. It's a shared role...It's like all romances. Tragic beyond all goodbyes.

    Well done.

    ♥Emily


  • rite gold member
    July 28, 2007

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    I think this poem must be about a rather confusing encounter of the type that traps us in its appeal. Before we become involved in such situations a whole lotta alarm bells start to ring, but we ignore them all, hoping for the best, preparing for the worst. Sometimes we get away from them without a scratch and sometimes we don't. Thanks for creating and sharing. Good luck with writing. Take care,

    U


  • katscradle
    July 28, 2007

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    A WONDERFUL POEM

    now i know i commented on this one but it doesnt show up you only have a fdeew sisspelled wprds ehr is no doubt her ir occurs in two stanzas but the poem over all is great it has great flow to it thank you for sharing it


    • MagicaI
      July 28, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thank you for pointing out my mispellings..I tried to fix it up asap and I think I got them all this time. Thank you for your comment nontheless!

      ~Jalix


  • katscradle
    July 28, 2007
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    A VERY GOOD PIECE

    although there are some type o's the poem over all is great i enjoyed reading it you mis spells her you have ehr the flow was very good thank you


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 27, 2007

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    Interesting! But I like it=]

    This was a verrry nice poem! I loved the repetition of "bye girl" after every section! Amazing=] I also liked the picture you used with this! Great piece


    • MagicaI
      July 27, 2007
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      Thanks. ^_^

      Well, you're the first to leave the comment, and I'll give you most appeciation. That's by pointing out the "bye girl" parts. I'm glad you found it interesting. Thanks again!

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