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Mitzy the Mermaid

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Mitzy was a mermaid
who lived in the sea
She always dreamed
of walking on two feet

Day dreaming to
her hearts content
Many days and
evenings spent

Tail flopping
here and there
Sitting on a rock
without a care

Suddenly a splash
and who appeared
But a fairy fish
with a shinny red beard

Mitzy was astonished
couldn't believe
A shinny fairy fish
is talking too me

My name is Earl
and I will grant your wish
For you Mitzy
a beautiful mermaid fish

With fairy dust
and some words from a spell
Mitzy's legs
began to swell

Mitzy looked down
with dismay
Now I can't
swim I'm afraid

Be careful what
you wish for
It may come true
Don't make any wish
before thinking it though

Mitzy still sits
atop a rock in
the middle of the sea
But her parents visit
and feed her regularly

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

"Mermaids Are Awesome" username is tawk

Beautiful background created by Jeannie D Hunter, thanks

Art by Marcus Pfister

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  • dreamdragon6484
    July 5, 2008

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    cool

    this ia a very good poem, the background is awsome.
    but I wanted a short story-- no rhyme.
    Thanks for entering though.


  • MrCrepsley
    June 14, 2008

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    Wow! I love the animation. Thank Jeannie for creating the background because it really sets off the mood. I love mermaids as well so thanks for entering a poem about mermaids. I haven't read a poem as good as this in months. You could even be better than Shakespeare if you put your mind to it.I might start another competition soon so look out for a contest by Maximum. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • NeonRose
    May 6, 2008
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    Ah..good moral to this story! Congratulations on the Bronze.


  • Melissa Burns
    April 26, 2008

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    lol! That was super cute! loved the finish to it and the line 'my name is earl' it made me giggle! Anyways thanks for the super cute entry into my ever so humble little contest!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 27, 2007

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    Lovely cute story here which also holds a moral in this. Lighthearted, yet with a message that we all should listen to. Enjoyed this, glad no darkness (some people still managed to sneak it in, or tried to anyway).

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    Oh I really like this you are very good at writing children poetry. I bet Jasmine enjoys mommys poetry. Goodluck in the contest

    • tawk gold member
      August 24, 2007
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      Thanks for the kind comments I just started writing stories in poetry form a couple months back I am really enjoying it. Maybe I am living the childhood that was stolen from me within my children's stories. I am so glad that you liked it.


  • Eternal-Jammy-Jam
    August 22, 2007
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    That is a really nice poem thanks for entering


  • Passionate Phoenix
    August 7, 2007

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    what a lovely poem, great use of words for rhyming and includes a moral as well! love it, well done and good luck! X


  • HugsForEveryone
    July 28, 2007

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    Wow! Great poem!! I really liked this! The rhyming was excellent and I could really feel her emotion when the fairy fish appeared. Nice job! Good luck in my contest! Keep up the great work!! Thanks for reading the rules
    ~PANDY~


  • Celticpoet silver member
    July 28, 2007
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    Excellent!

    A story with a moral...Excellent!...Dan x

    • tawk gold member
      July 28, 2007
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      Thank you I have not written many children's writes but I am more and more. I really love doing it! Thanks for your comments and applause

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